1st Verse of my new rap

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  1. UnknownRapper said:

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    If you don't believe that man came from evolution,
    just think about the way we find the solution,
    how we came from the earth but destroy it with pollution,
    we vote mindlessly for political constitution.
    people are blinded by ignorant politicians,
    you believe everything you hear on television,
    an oblong box in the corner of the room,
    you sit blissfully unaware as your thoughts are consumed,
    you only believe what you can see,
    unaware of all the things that could possibly be,
    underneath all the lies you've been made to believe,
    in this war for slavery you've unknowingly conceived,
    to the people who are unrealistically evil,
    taken advantage of the weak the poor and the feeble,
    its unreal the thoughts that can run through your head,
    to change the world all you need is a man and his bed,
    his dreams and his willingness to succeed,
    guns and ammunition is all that he needs,
    but this man can be stopped if you use your mentality,
    as he is just a man with a psychopathic personality,
    stick him in a mental hospital and make him deal with reality.


    Leave a Comment and tell me what you think please, thanks.
  2. shaunfoz said:

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    i like it mate, yeah fairly similar style to me, it gets the reader engrossed and what to read on, good work
  3. ir1 said:

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    Reads more like a poem to me.
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    Molotova said:

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    I think u have potential but it reads like a poem indeed.
    Read some more lyrics and compare them to yours.
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