Pls review

I'm not a native speaker of English, so I expect the following to have a lot of "illiterations", but anyway, I'm gonna give myself a try. This isn't the final version, so any feedback will be highly desirable. Please don't pay attention to the rhythmical structure, it's written specially for a finished melody. Thanks in advance for any critique, however hard it will be. If you don't have the time to write an opinion, please at least rate it on a 5-point scale. Thanks!

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Hail thee almighty Lord
For taking my eyes so I can see
The music of this Godsent world
In all its blind purity

Hail thee almighty Lord
For taking my ears so I can hear
Beyond the noises of this world
The music that’s inside of me

Hail thee almighty Lord
For taking my soul out of my chest
Divided from this Godsent world
It’s liberated and at last
Lives in the music that I left
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Is this supposed to be a Poem or something? Still cool though

Hi, no, it's just lyrics for a song.