Kates song

[Gemego]

Hi guys, I have started writing songs for fun and I was wondering if you could give me some feedback on this one. Cheers


Kates song:

There's a girl with a heart as sweet as a song
A mind that’s gentle yet so strong
A voice that would sing the tunes
Of all the love songs she felt when she was with you

Now her sweet melodic voice is crumbling down
She just can't seem to find the sound
Head pounding with memories
Heavy heart, broken in two not knowing quite what to do

Are you happy that you have caused this pain?
Made tears spill from her blue eyes like the pouring rain
Turned a bright happy girl into a sad sorry mess
Just wishing something could take away the pain in her chest
This sorrow and hurt is from your depart
So please stay away and save her heart

She is trying to forget and carry on
Trying to trick herself
Pretend that nothing is wrong
But no amount of John Mayer or Missy can disguise
The pain that she shows in her eyes

Are you happy that you have caused this pain?
Made tears spill from her blue eyes like the pouring rain
Turned a bright happy girl into a sad sorry mess
Just wishing something could take away the pain in her chest
This sorrow and hurt is from your depart
So please stay away and save her heart

[Jim Colyer]

Nice song. I wonder if Kate is a real person that you know or a fictional character.

[Gemego]

Thanks Jim Colyer I wrote this song about my sister (kate) when she was going through a breakup.