Without You

[Zakynthos]

You or nothing...and I'll dive in the water
To cleanse my mind...so cold it burns
"Go drown yourself", she says. I will not falter
See the mirror in my eyes...there's life after death

[...]

I'm feeling you, your warm hands thinner
Can you lend me some warmth?
I'm always cold, my blood thickened
Is it hypnotic what you fear most?

I know you were scared of me
Out of all the things, you couldn't see
Me losing all my hopes for happiness
How could you be so heartless?

Yet, without you
I'm flying in the void
Yet, without you
I'm unconsciously destroyed

All or nothing, grey tears in your eyes
Not even these soften my heart of dirt
I'm already dead, so put on your wild beauty
I always forgave you, you the pretty, bad girl

Last time you hear my ghostly breath
You chose to spread our earthly torture
We have one chance to make amends
Die with me because I loved you

I know you were scared of me
Out of all the things, you couldn't see
Me losing all my hopes for happiness
How could you be so heartless?

Yet, without you
I'm flying in the void
Yet, without you
I'm unconsciously destroyed

And no, I will never wet this paper shelter
It's you who should have cried, now you deserve it
Yet, without you the world's not any better
I'm slowly dying and you silently observe it

[MoonRide*r*]

Great! It kinda reminds me of stuff I used to try to write, 12-18 months ago.
Does the verse "I knew you were scared of me" serve as a bridge? That's the way it feels. Regardless, this is some fine writing.

[Doug Denslowe]

"So put on your wild beauty",I couldn't have said it better!Your becoming a force to reckon with!Good job,Zak!

[Zakynthos]

Great! It kinda reminds me of stuff I used to try to write, 12-18 months ago.
Does the verse "I knew you were scared of me" serve as a bridge? That's the way it feels. Regardless, this is some fine writing.

It could be a bridge. Thank you.