A love song.

[Serapino]

If I'm the last man on this earth, will you let me hold you...
If I'm the last guy to see you breath, will you let me kiss your lips....
If I asked you to marry me, would you say yes or no?

I'm a lonely guy without much motivation, until I saw you
I wished and day dreamed I could kiss your complextion
Carmel skin tone, close to mine, I've only dreamed....dreamed...

I sit back and wish, wish for you to choose me if that time shall come...
I wait in this basement only dreaming that you will recognize me as yours...
This piece of paper will not be enough for me to show my emotions...

If I'm the last man on this earth, will you let me hold you...
If I'm the last guy to see you breath, will you let me kiss your lips...
If I asked you to marry me, would you say yes or no...

I watch you everyday you come by the channel...
Mr. Admire is what you could call me if you like....
I'm a fan of every kind of nickname, at least the ones you give to me...

I'm hoping you realize that your carmel skine tone feels so right...
Yet itn my own words, could you realize that I'm the question of existence...
I'd never question yours, I'd only hold you till the rest in peace moment...

If I'm the last man opn this earth, will you let me hold you...
If I'm the last guy to see you breath, will you let me kiss your lips...
If I asked you to marry, would you say yes or no....

Would you Queen Latifah...

[smoothtung]

Interesting to say the least. There are basically no rhyming elements whatsoever in this piece but the stanzas and chorus for the most part seem to be written solidly so there's no question this is a piece that really only you know what it sounds like.
I'm guessing but I'd say that yea, this is good. Interesting, but good. I don't find Latifa too attractive aha but hey to eaches own right?
Lol keep it up man and take care

[Frankie Jasmine]

@Serapino: 98% agree with Smoothtung. I would say this is interesting and good. The song strikes me as a ballad. Personally, I take it seriously . . . although there is an option to make it a "clever" song. What in English we call "tongue in cheek"--sung seriously, but with a dry sense of humor.

As for me, I take it seriously. I like it. But then, I am a romantic at times . . . .

Oh, and I think Queen Latifah is B-E-A-U-T-I-F-U-L, smart, and talented!