advice please :)

[Gemego]

Hi
I am trying to write a song and so far I only have two verses. Feedback and any ideas on other verses or choruses would be greatly appreciated! Thanks


Here we both are
What are we suppose to do
Your sick of me and I'm sick of you
We both played games
Until the other one fell
Now we must pretend we're not going through this hell

Through all the lies
We both could see how
Everything was wrong, not how it should be
What can we do
To forget it all again
Pretend nothing was happening, that it never began

[MoonRide*r*]

This has some promise, and I have 1 or 2 ideas... but they're not complete yet, so I'll come back in a day or two and try again

[Gemego]

thanks MoonRide*r*

[Matt6660]

This is a great start I can't wait to read the finished version.

[Gemego]

Thanks Matt6660

[MoonRide*r*]

I haven't forgotten about this. Just dealing with a back problem and doped up on drugs for the past few days, so my sense of concentration and focus are not what they should be. But I do have an idea or two, if you can be just a little more patient