somebody help me with the song

i'm just a n00b here but anywayz i composed something up against some1 can any1 read this and tell me if the lyrics are any good

Bear/Nam-It

A guy nicknamed bear
animal in human's gear the worst nightmare
his body's all sphere covered with hair
even king kong would need a second thought to go near
his face is all pale, cheeks all red he's on diet no he wont eat no bread
his hair pattern is wierd he has webs on his chest
he steps out the door with his hair all set
with some stinky red oil that he applies daily
heres the real deal his brand is CHAMELI
he's got 4 options but no girl, why is that??
"but ofcourse i dont wanna hurt other three u crack??"
in the list his sis tops the tract, "well i'm her desire i cant ignore that, thats the reason why I made her my sis

infact"
"now i've chosen the lucky one to keep my options intact"
***** *** motha****a u are so cocky and wierd
we took a poll, she wouldnt even **** on ur curly beard

[CHORUS]
I dont want him near X2
He may be feelin' pissed off but I dont care
He may call on some felon but I dont fear

A dog licks his master's feet right, but even he bites when his master starts to fright
but this dog's different, no he wont bite instead he wouldnt even bark at such a sight
to keep things between his master and him alright he greets him from morning till the end of the night
his parties are the best just like entering a fight, u get no food, no drinks c'm on man this is the height

[CHORUS]
I dont want him near X2
He may be feelin' pissed off but I dont care
He may call on some felon but I dont fear
He may be feelin' pissed off but I dont care
He may call on some felon but I dont fear

we got this ms. hottie in our skool
she may look cute but she's a wannabe cool
she rejected me sayin' "look at you, you dont rule"
she was famous for she had got screwed
actually they both had just slept nude
stop laughing guys dont be so rude!!!
what do u expect well she's a virge,
this took their relationship on the urge
he broke up with her i cant believe shes so dumb
she would have had it had her G-Spot been numb
dont sweat it girl there are a lot of men to pump
anytime u wanna spar we've got some cum
the bear was tryin' to gulp his pain
someone else doing her drives him insane
dawg ur his bro how can u even jack off in her name
"don't u get it yeah i am ****in' lame, by the way jerkin' off and having it aren't the same"
whats the matter guys dont u all wanna know his name
one day on practice we had a game
he was acting like a star so we had this bet
he wins and we agree that yeah he's some threat
the bear had his chance and was dribblin' nice
a li'l boy snatched the ball from him like twice or thrice
he threatened the l'il boy and put up a ****in' stare
told the li'l guy "don't you come anywhere near, when I dribble the ball just stand still here"
the boy kept thinking what to do
somebody go tell him its like playin' with poo, u hit it with ur best shot u spoil ur own shoe
we were all laughing sitting right there, he cried out loud "u owe me some apology here"
even after apologizing in the loo, his pal calls up asking "what did u do??"
i just wish to kick his *** into the bin, even after ignoring he forces himself in


[CHORUS]
He may be feelin' pissed off but I dont care
He may call on some felon but I dont fear
He may be feelin' pissed off but I dont care
He may call on some felon but I dont fear

*CHAMELI - is some real low brand across the world

Yo holla back you are on the right track just remeber for radio sake keep it between 14- 18 bar peace from the WarrdruM check out my sample from one of my songs. one