The Cold...comments please!

[theconcept]

[Verse 1]

don't turn up your nose
he's not asking for gold
he's just another kid left in the cold
and he has been here so long
but he doesnt know why
because the story of his family
has never been told

[fill]

he sees nice coats walk by
and expensive rides
a class he's never known
he reffers to as the inside
the air bites his knees
through old tatterd jeans
that are covered with mud
from the place where he sleeps


[chorus]

but when the rain comes
to wash out the cold
and thre is love in the parks
and summer begins to
unfold
he is a pioneer
and his tears
wont freeze
until next year


[verse]

he has never had toys
or been friends with boys
that run through his acres
and cause all the noise
that he hears every day
in the worst kind of way
as he sits in the shade
and wonders why he cant play

and when it is dark
and the moon is a glow
he converses with the men
the boys made in the snow
all the questions he asks
of all the things that he lacks
he feels wont make it to god
and bring his parents back
but he wants it so bad
to have a mom and dad
or just someone who cares
if he cries whe he's sad

[chorus] x2

[SOULstice]

This is hella good. I could actually see the music video for this as I read it (the second time, ofcourse). I'd like to see you somehow tie in how having no parents resulted in him being homeless. It would make the story even more interesting. The only part I don't get is the reference to him being a "pioneer." Oh, well. Good stuff

[benappleby]

It's good!!!!! It's full of depth!

[Girl next door]

Brilliant lyrics!! So many emotions!!