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04-03-2007, 04:20 PM
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Join Date: Mar 2007
Location: in my head
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Song i wrote in class today...
hows it now?? just fixed it, still not done...
I've tryed to hide!
INSIDE!! *<--screamed*
tryed to escape!
THIS LIFE! *<--screamed*
Tryed to be free--
OF THIS NIGHTMARE! *<--screamed*
but it wont leave me be!---
This chains me,--
CHAIN! *<--screamed*
It Pains me,--
PAIN *<--screamed*
wont let me breath!
its dominating,--
DOMINATING! *<--screamed*
over-rating,--
OVER-RATING! *<--screamed*
wont let me live!
*echo*
Try to forget this?
it will bind me tighter!
try to take this?
it will decimate my life!
it takes all my will,
just to take this torment!
just try to take it away!
*echo over*
This Pains me--!
F***ing PAIN! *<--screamed*
it Chains me!!
F***ing CHAINS! *<--screamed*
it tears at my Life!
My Life Is all but over----!
Last edited by Liulkun : 04-08-2007 at 04:10 PM.
Reason: Ajustment
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04-03-2007, 07:07 PM
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Join Date: Mar 2007
Location: Canada
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I like the echo effect between voices, that sounds rad in metal. Yeah it could use some work, but its full of good ideas and potential.
7/10 
KEEP ROCKIN!
Gawain
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04-03-2007, 08:39 PM
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Join Date: Mar 2007
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thanks, by the way, i just updated it, look at the 1st post
Last edited by Liulkun : 04-08-2007 at 04:12 PM.
Reason: forgot something....
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04-04-2007, 03:43 PM
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Join Date: Mar 2007
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i'll work on it then post up the results |
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04-07-2007, 05:52 PM
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short but sweet mate its cool :0)
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04-08-2007, 03:55 PM
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Join Date: Mar 2007
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thx, im almost done with ajustments to the lyrics...
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04-09-2007, 12:42 PM
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Join Date: Mar 2007
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yeah the adjustments are rad. I like the echo effect thingy. It could be made a b-i-t leangthier..... kinda short. Good job though
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They exploit it, then patened it,
And profit from the people who died.
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04-10-2007, 11:45 AM
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Join Date: Mar 2007
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yea, i' work on the length soon, i like to write short lyrics so that i can fix that part then write part 2
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04-14-2007, 11:54 AM
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Join Date: Mar 2007
Location: Canada
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Ok this spam is too rediculous, im trying to contact the lyrics forum moderator.
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The media loves their latest tragic suicide,
They exploit it, then patened it,
And profit from the people who died.
-Nevermore
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04-14-2007, 11:54 AM
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Join Date: Mar 2007
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I mean the lyrics review mod sorry. I cant delete them here, only in community, music and prof ques.
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The media loves their latest tragic suicide,
They exploit it, then patened it,
And profit from the people who died.
-Nevermore
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04-14-2007, 01:55 PM
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Join Date: May 2006
Location: The Motor City
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Sorry Guys, I'm going to close this thread. It's getting slammed by an autospammer. Please feel free to start it again.
Thanks, Jetstew
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