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Old 04-13-2007, 10:54 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Default A song i wrote after a test the other day

Here is a song i wrote the other day while sitting in class after a test. It is kind of a screamo/emo/hard rock song, like Hawthorne Heights-ish stuff. Comments appreciated.

Come On

When you're down and when you're tired
I'll hook you up on the social wire
Come on over and we will talk
Lets get out and take a walk

Come on
When you're feelin' low,
Come on
Let's give it a go
and i'll be there.

Call to me and i'll be there
I'll see you up atop the stair
Let me in we'll have some fun
We'll be like a loaded gun.

Come on
when you're feelin' low
come on
lets give it a go
Come on
Don't ever say no
Come on
lets give it a go
and i'll be there.

When you're down and when you're tired
It looks like your plan backfired
Let me help you to your feet
you'll recover from the deceit.




Its still a work in progress.

Mike

Last edited by MDizzle : 04-19-2007 at 06:32 AM. Reason: accidental added words didn't flow right
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Old 04-16-2007, 12:40 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Hey! I think that so far those lyrics have got potential and would fit in really well with the type of music/ style that you want to put it to! I think they're quite good! Would be good to see the finished results! Those lyrics you can relate to, thats good I like them!
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