i started on this what do u think

[cry_baby]

my life ls filled with pain
everyday i must pry,
god help help me
through the day
just answer me
just take it away


*yep still needs work*

[RapJunkie]

I don't like it, it's to short and don't rhyme or nothing i mean it got a good meaning and stuff but I just don't like it..

[Pesky]

Originally Posted by cry_baby

my life ls filled with pain
everyday i must pry,
god help help me
through the day
just answer me
just take it away


*yep still needs work*

Your spelling and grammar are right on -- which is much more than can be said for some.