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Old 04-30-2007, 08:58 PM   #1 (permalink)
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A song I wrote tonight, I'm only 15, and perhaps not as skilled as many other writers on this forum site. But please, give it a chance, critique it, it's a short song.

Verse1

Your silhoutte is fading
as the the stars fade into dawn
Disapearing slowly, leaving us as one
Another night awaiting, but its so far away


Chorus

And Im worrying so much inside,
Is the world going to end
Will the stars and the moon shine tonight
Or has their time been spent?


Verse

As dawn turns to dusk, I can't see a thing
Your silouette is nothing your disapearing
I call out to you, and only the slightest whisper heard
One phrase, One lie, three words.


Chorus

And Im worrying so much inside,
Is the world going to end
Well the stars and the moon shine tonight
Or has their time been spent?


Verse 2

And here I stand, and darkness falls
Im waiting for the stars wishing you'd here my calls
but they fade away too, and the moon has not shone.
I guess every star dies and moves on

Prechorus/Bridge thing

So this is it, I have to leave
You probably wont care, your already gone.

Chorus

And Im worrying so much inside,
Is the world going to end
Well the stars and the moon shine tonight
Or has their time been spent?
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