Hi there I think you're lyrics are really good, I also agree with psychotica, I think that maybe just with some of your lines shorten them so that it's short and punchy and with more impact as most of your lines are quite short. So for example just drop the 'By' out of this line 'By the charlatans clampdown', your 'I’m no sheep to your lies, Was trying not to bite back' maybe change it so it's more lines, to I am no sheep, to your lies, Trying not too bite back. I'd maybe change the 'But you’re so hypocritical, You break all the rules when, No one is looking' to You're so hypocritical, You break all rules, When noone's looking, and maybe the 'No thank you I don’t want your type, Not in my life and not at this time' change this to be more lines again so the'yre shorter for more of an impact maybe like No thank you, I don't want youo're type, Not in my life, Not this time. I know these changes aren't big but I think that maybe they'd help, however this is just my opinion I could be completely wrong! The lyric are really good just maybe need a bit of tweaking! Hope I've helped!
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