your opinion of the lyrics 2

[student123]

i came up with these lyrics after i saw a documentary on joe strummer
called joe strummer: the future is unwritten

The Centre of the Ring

people can change anything they want
to either something they need or to something they don't
its a shame that this power always goes to waste
perhaps cause people are angry to be runnin the rat race
buts its only the rat race if you work at something you hate
otherwise you'd be happy and be open to change
but to be down right honest, i can't imagine a world
where all is good and heavenly light will shine upon us

there will never be a day when people only die of old age
there will always be fighting, disagreements and rage
its just human nature, it may not sound the best
but this is no reason to give up and rest
because if we never tried to better ourselves
we would not proceed and life would be hell
it's the strive for better life, both for you and for all
that makes it all worth living, and worth the highs and the falls
so once you listen to this, you free to think what you like
you may think i'm wrong or you may think i'm right
or might just think i'm just some hippie punk
once again complaining about the government
but listen up jack and face the facts
that at the moment its bad but it could be so much worse

I don't think that with whites and blacks
that racism will be a thing of the past
but i do believe that we are one in the same
and to fight racism is a winner's game
and if we continue to fight it young people see it's wrong
and the won't have to listen to some preachy song


so in the words of a man who used to strum and sing
"its time to take humanity into the centre of the ring"
and "greed it ain't goin anywhere",
"they should have that on a big bill board across time square"

say what you do and don't like thanks

[rawchord]

i think the first four lines of verse one and two are the best but then after it seems to, like you say in verse three a bit preachy almost a speech
there is room for improvement and if you juggle around a bit with the rest of it i think it would be much better
these are just my thoughts
each to there own
well done

[SpudMunky]

Hi there! I find that what you have written is very powerful and also very political! I would have to agree with rawchord though it is almost like a speech, and I think that the part that makes it like that is the second verse, but otherwise the writing is brilliant!