Five Knuckles

[yourlifestorywales]

Five Knuckles - Slightly different to my normal soft songs- check it out, thanks.


As another five knuckles crash into your face
He shouts, he needs his space
And at the hospital, another brutal case
Remember now, to say you’ve fallen down the staircase
You’ve fallen down the staircase

You have to, he’s taking control
But you know, if you keep it like this
You’ll forever be in this hellhole

Take the key, and put it in the keyhole
Leave behind everything, and close the door behind you
Anything to get out of this hellhole
Anything to get out of this hellhole

As another five knuckles crash into your face
He shouts, he needs his space
And at the hospital, another brutal case
Remember now, to say you’ve fallen down the staircase
You’ve fallen down the staircase

You’ve dropped down way to many times
And haven’t got back up
Do you know what it feels like to be alive?
Free from others grasps?
No I didn’t think so
As you lay there bleeding in the snow

As another five knuckles crash into your face
He shouts, he needs his space
And at the hospital, another brutal case
Remember now, to say you’ve fallen down the staircase
You’ve fallen down the staircase

As another five knuckles crash into your face
He shouts, he needs his space
And at the hospital, another brutal case
Remember now, to say you’ve fallen down the staircase
You’ve fallen down the staircase


Copyright © 2007 Sam Evans All Rights Reserved

[SpudMunky]

Hi there! You are very right! This is different to what you usually write, however it is still very good! There's a couple of lines that I would change, the lines that mention "this hellhole" I would change for His hellhole, and then I would also change this line as well, "And at the hospital, another brutal case" to something like Standing at the hospital, yet another brutal case, or Standing at the hospital, you're just another brutal case. This is just my opinion of course, but those lyrics are really good! A fantastic theme, a subject that doesn't get hit upon often! You're writing also fits in well with the theme, it's very sharp and to the point! Very well done!