into pieces

[GlennB.]

(verse 1)
my heart stopped
the day you left my side
i thought we were forever
you blinded me with all your lies

toooogether..
was the thought i had for us to be
forrrrever...
now i cant sleep at night and its all because of..
you!

(hook)
you broke my heart into pieces
now i gotta mend it all backk
you took my life with you when you left
now i gotta find a reason
to put this all behind me..
as for you i do..wish you the best!

(verse 2)
you never thought of me
it was always about you
would you believe me when i said i couldnt sleep?
what would you do?!

If i...
brought my heart and soul to you
could i..
bring you back in my life ..
cause thats ALL i wanna DO!

(hook)

(bridge)
you found another man
and i wish i was in his shoes..
the things he says to you
is what i used to say..
now im all alone..
wishin you would come back this wayy.
cause baby you!!..

(hook 2x)


(outro-behind hook)
you said you were mine forever!
how could i believe all your lies??!
i still think about u baby!
as i sit at home and cry...i cry...i cryyy..
BABY!

[SOULstice]

Cool song. The only thing is the hook, the last part ;
"as for you i do..wish you the best!"
It doesn't make sense to me that you would wish her the best after reading all the other lyrics. She broke your heart, lied, found someone else, caused all this grief. Now if you truly do still wish her the best, I think it would be ok as a regular lyric, just not part of the chorus, to be repeated over and again. It interrupts the flow of the song. Let me put it into the context of your song:

"as for you i do..wish you the best!"
(vs 2 begins)
"you never thought of me..."

"as for you i do..wish you the best!"
(bridge begins)
"you found another man'

"as for you i do..wish you the best!"
(outro begins)
"you said you were mine forever!
how could i believe all your lies??!"

But these are just my thoughts. In the end it's your song and your art.

[GlennB.]

so...instead of that "wish you the best"part...what would u suggest??

[SOULstice]

Actually, now that I think about it, you could leave it as is. It would be more of a sarcastic approach. The only change I would make is;

"as for you, i really do...wish you the best!"

And the way I would sing it, the word best would be belted out for a whole 8 count. Something like at the very end of this song

YouTube - misery business (acoustic) - paramore

[GlennB.]

Originally Posted by SOULstice

Actually, now that I think about it, you could leave it as is. It would be more of a sarcastic approach. The only change I would make is;

"as for you, i really do...wish you the best!"

And the way I would sing it, the word best would be belted out for a whole 8 count. Something like at the very end of this song

YouTube - misery business (acoustic) - paramore

yea..paramoe is actually a band i listen to.. thanks for the input!!