Please give your opinions (1st post)
This is my first time posting lyrics on a forum and none of them are 100% so let me hear anything criticism, compliments, etc. Your thoughts are appreciated. Thanks. By the way, There are 2 different songs posted in this topic.
SONG #1
The page numbers are slightly sporadic,
But that's just how things seem to go
Sitting on the sand, The sky is my window
Darkness falls, but lights abound
Courtesy of the stars,
make the heaven's crown
I want to meet it's ruler
The starter of it all
I wondered who it was
Was it anyone at all?
View the writing from the other side
Backwards and slightly blurred
Clarity breeds progress
Randomness reigns clear
What a ****ing mess
I'm left with here
But that's just life,
Catch it before it goes
Who started this path...
{NEEDS FINISHED}
SONG #2 (How Do You Rate?)
Did you pay the fee
To get into the play?
You're the star of the show
Stand and clap if you may
Watching every move
Analyze your last decision
No one is a harsher critic
Than the source of your ambition
Now you're older
Slightly more wrinkled
Not the main attraction
Still get a good review?
Be content, you did your job
Never turned your back on your god
Three children and a loving wife
How do you rate your life?
Watching every move
Analyze your last decision
No one is a harsher critic
Than the source of your ambition
How do your rate
How do your rate
How do your rate...Your life?
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