lyrics for a song #1 - your opinion

[jkob]

hello guys. this is the first time in this forum for me and i would like to introduce myself. im a german songwriter, 31 years old and i want to sing my songs in english. i want to record an album and i need support in my lyrics and want you to ask for your opinion. i often used a dictionary to translate the german words to english, but thats not perfectly done . i want to learn more about english-songwriting and i think here is a good place for my requests.

so heres my lyrics for a song:


lyrics for a song #1

chorus:

i never rocked
i´ve never been the cool
i´ve never been that kind of winning people
living their live by other rules

i´ve never been precious
or full glory and fame
i never loved myself more
than anyone else

refrain:

then you came into my life
the king and queen without a folk
no matter what they told
we stuck together

everything was fine
but the quiet, killing murder
one hit strong and fast
broke our life

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what do you think?