The Mystery In Me

[kords222]

Path meandering, different stages of a dream
Words unspoken, truth yet to be seen
Swallowed lies and broke-down fences
It's time to face the consequences
What could be the destiny, the recompense for
the one who gave it all away

What is real, I can't place
The hands that hide a covered face
but the taste still decorates my brain
with the beauty that remains in me

Peace increasing every time i look inside
I find the the voices screaming starting to subside
Crooked lines now are straightening
Darkness dies shadows fading
I don't want to flee the mystery, the light I'm facing
It is still in me, and you can't take that away

I know this is real, 'cause in this place
Hands that hid now clear the tears from my face
Divine embrace has chased away my pain
Replaced by love and grace and what remains
is the taste of the truth that sets me free
That divides the veil and shows the mystery in me

[Restoration]

Ok...i feel that right there homeboy!
Keep bangin that message out there for the world to take witness'
to HIS GLORY

-Restoration

[spiritgirl25]

it is really good but you might want to think about making it longer

[majacks]

it's good but i dont really understand any of it
no effence but at the start i didn't feel any thing and thought it was boaring and stoped reading it
no offence please i'm just telling you the truth so you can make it better and get my point

[lollipop]

@majacks: if you write your honest opinion, and you stay polite (like you have), then I don't think, that someone takes your honest comments as offensive

@kords222: I am in same boat with majacks...
For a poem, it is good, but for song lyrics...it has to be a really good melody in that song, to make me listen this difficult text

[kords222]

Thanks so much for the feedback guys. It is all very helpful.