The break-up dance

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  1. shelleykapowski said:

    Default The break-up dance

    Verse 1
    Hands up in the air
    No more pretending I care
    No one's gonna believe it
    And this idea must be wrong
    It wasn't working all along
    No one else could conceive it

    Bridge 1
    I know it's time I got over you
    So that's what I'm gonna do
    But your mirror reflects me
    You'll never forget me
    I'll always be around

    Chorus
    But you're never, never, never gonna be
    'Cause I'm better, better, better off you see
    That you're never, never, never gonna be the right one for me

    Verse 2
    Look at my hands, look at my feet
    While we are walking down the street
    We don't know how to do this
    Perfect words, perfect kiss
    We just say "We can't resist"
    But I know they see through it

    Bridge 2
    I still love it when we touch
    But it's just so bad so much
    I gotta go on without you
    I always was the optimist
    Never thought it'd come to this
    I never thought I could doubt you

    Chorus

    Verse 3 (Different from other two verses, obviously)
    We gotta stop doing this break-up dance
    Turn of the music and give the outside world a chance

    Chorus


    It's the first song I've written in four months, and it has a lot of "gotta"s in it, which sucks, but it sounds much better with music. And feedback is very appreciated! Thanks!
     
  2. ELLIS said:

    Thumbs up Eezzee

    It Was Pretty Good.i Read It, And Trust Me I Don't Read Much.it Keep Me Goin.thumbs Up.
    EEZZEE
     
  3. Buzzsaw said:

    Thumbs up Good Job

    Good job on the song. I hope you can write some more songs like that.
     
  4. Luke of Metal said:

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    Not bad but the first bridge should be called a pre-chorus as there's only one bridge in a song