New Song PLEASE COMMENT!

[Ninja TK]

Get Out of My System
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I think about it everyday,
the thoughts won't go away.
It wears away at my soul,
making me rotten inside,
bitterly cold.
Never is a time that I dont remember.
There's always something that wont let me surrender.
Making me hard to the core on the inside..

But something keeps telling me,
not to go,
but to stay,
It pains me to think this way.
It's just not meant to be,
so leave.

GET OUT OF MY SYSTEM!
GET OUT OF MY SYSTEM!
BACK OFF AND JUST LISTEN!
GET OUT OF MY SYSTEM!

"In the darkness is the blind",
sometimes I think,
often times wonder,
sometimes its better not to see,
while the truth stares back,
keeping me a caged bird,
starving to be free.

But something keeps telling me,
not to go,
but to stay,
It pains me to think this way.
It's just not meant to be,
so leave.

[Throw it up again..]
Get out of my system..
[Throw it up again..]
Get out of my system..
[Throw it up again..]
Get out of my system..
[Throw it up again..]
Get out of my....
SYSTEM!!!

But something keeps telling me,
not to go,
but to stay,
It pains me to think this way.
It's just not meant to be,
so leave.
But something keeps telling me,
not to go,
but to stay,
It pains me to think this way.
It's just not meant to be,
so leave.

[SpudMunky]

This is quite powerful writing! I like this maybe needs an extra verse.. possibly but it's really good just as it is I like the shouting being thrown into the mix I think that that's the part thaht makes it so powerful! I like how there is alos some mystery to the song as to exactly what it is about, the reader/listener can put their own spin on it.