Pass It Over Here

[Midnight_Rider]

Heres a song i wrote. any advice or criticism is welcome and appreciated, thanks.

The government man will only tell lies,
He will sensationalize, but we must arise.
We must stand and arise to decriminalize.
Jah knows it’s time to take all the reefer,
Pack a bowl and pass it over here!

Babylon man will push his pharmaceuticals,
There’s danger and all the youth just falls, yeah.
Just because the money they make.
Please mister listen it is time for you to wake.
Think for yourself and see it is fine to bake.
Think for yourself and see everyman should partake.

The government man will only tell lies,
He will sensationalize, but we must arise.
We must stand and arise to decriminalize.
Jah knows it’s time to take all the reefer,
Pack a bowl and pass it over here!

You know the Rasta man can go to jail for life.
Just ‘cause the plant, he don’t cause no strife.
I and I see the people dying in the streets,
But mister police only fighting all the weed.
Is there truly a need when innocent still bleed?
We can all fight this senseless oppression.
Just roll up a blunt and have you a smoke-session.

The government man will only tell lies,
He will sensationalize, but we must arise.
We must stand and arise to decriminalize.
Jah knows it’s time to take all the reefer,
Pack a bowl and pass it over here!
Yeah, pack a bowl and pass it to me please!

[Tracy-Turnblad]

The ideas are good, it's not jut like another love song and there are some good lines, but you've just thought of any random word that ryhmes and stuck it at the end of a scentence that doesn't relate and barerly makes any sense.

[Jester]

I find it hard to believe anyone smoking that much post can pronounce pharmaceuticals :P


they're good lyrics, I'd personally shorten the words unless you're going for a rap style as opposed to a reggae style.