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Old 03-08-2008, 03:52 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Default Wastin' Away

To feel pleasure, and feel no pain
Aint it humanity's goal?
You gotta do, what you need to do
to fill the hole.
Whether its for love, whether its for money
its just skin you cant shed
so get your lips on the bottle stop runnin'
just get lost instead

You're just Wastin', You're just Wastin' away (x2)

Get real, its no better
to ignore the world around you
Its gonna come, sooner or later
but I dont know what you're gonna do
Just look, look in the mirror
tell me what you see
cause I see a little girl, whos drownin'
In a sea of broken dreams

You're just Wastin', You're just Wastin' away (x2)

Spread your legs, for the camera
for some extra cash
Gettin' off, on a strangers bed
just to fill your glass
Get real, quit ignorin'
the pain is there to stay
this is goodbye, its all over
Cause you're just wasting away

You're just Wastin', You're just Wastin' away (x4)
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Old 03-09-2008, 04:56 AM   #2 (permalink)
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...ok... a little deep *pardon the expression*
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Old 03-11-2008, 11:40 AM   #3 (permalink)
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K... uh........
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Old 03-12-2008, 06:11 AM   #4 (permalink)
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What do you mean by that?
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Old 03-12-2008, 03:40 PM   #5 (permalink)
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What thrilling responses.
btw these lyrics are supposed to be hard rock (think acdc gnr aerosmith), just to put em' in perspective.
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Old 03-12-2008, 05:31 PM   #6 (permalink)
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Still a little deep for hard rock...


...Those three bandsa you mentioned were about drinking and having a good time (until Aerosmith's later albums)
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Old 03-12-2008, 06:03 PM   #7 (permalink)
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Yeah but the thing is that everybody can write stupid lyrics about drinking and smoking.

Lets all get High
We Can feel alright
Then we'll get drunk
and get into a fight
and then get some chicks
and party til the dawn
wake up ther next morning
passed out on the front lawn

They're generic, boring.Took me 5 seconds to come up with. If youre going to stand out from the hundreds of thousands of bands that are out there then you need to be different somehow. Might as well start with having inteligent lyrics.
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Old 03-13-2008, 04:11 AM   #8 (permalink)
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I'm new to these forums so I thought I'd give some feedback before posting any lyrics of my own. I read that these were hard rock lyrics, I dont know how it sounds when you sing it, but when I read it I get a poetry feel. That doesnt mean its ***** or anything, it just means that its deep and the way you constructed the bars was like a poet would. All in all I'd say this was a good peice, my only criticism would be to add more detail.
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Old 03-13-2008, 05:41 AM   #9 (permalink)
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Yeah but the thing is that everybody can write stupid lyrics about drinking and smoking.

Lets all get High
We Can feel alright
Then we'll get drunk
and get into a fight
and then get some chicks
and party til the dawn
wake up ther next morning
passed out on the front lawn

They're generic, boring.Took me 5 seconds to come up with. If youre going to stand out from the hundreds of thousands of bands that are out there then you need to be different somehow. Might as well start with having inteligent lyrics.
You seem like someone who assumes first before asking questions because personally those lyrics seem like what everyone thinks when someone mentions "rock 'n' roll" lyrics without knowing what they really are.

AC/DC - FOR THOSE ABOUT TO ROCK (WE SALUTE YOU)

We roll tonight [We're on tonight]
To the guitar bite
Yeah, yeah, oh

Stand up and be counted
For what you are about to receive
We are the dealers
We'll give you everything you need
Hail hail to the good times
'Cause rock has got the right of way
We ain't no legend, ain't no cause
We're just livin' for today

For those about to rock, we salute you
For those about to rock, we salute you

We rock at dawn on the front line
Like a bolt right out of the blue
The sky's alight with the guitar bite
Heads will roll and rock tonight

For those about to rock, we salute you
For those about to rock, we salute you
For those about to rock, we salute you
Yes we do
For those about to rock, we salute you

Oooh, we salute!
Oooh, ooooh yeah

We're just a battery for hire with a guitar fire
Ready and aimed at you
Pick up your balls and load up your cannon
For a twenty-one gun salute

For those about to rock - fire
We salute you
For those about to rock, we salute you
Those about to rock - fire
We salute you
Fire
We salute you
We salute you
Come on, whooa
For those about to rock, we salute you
For those about to rock, we salute you
For those about to rock, we salute you
For those about to rock, we salute you

Shoot, shoot
Shoot, shoot

For those of you, for those who rock
Yeah
(Ain't gonna get tired, won't take a break, we salute you.)

We salute you
We salute you
We salute you

Fire


They're pretty much perfect if you ask me
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Old 03-13-2008, 03:19 PM   #10 (permalink)
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Im not referring to classic lyrics from ACDC, VH, Aerosmith, GNR. I know those lyrics and how great they are. I was talking about all of the newer rock thats out there. Have you heard Airbourne? They're pretty cool but in their lyrics sound like AC/DC C-sides. Same with Supagroup, Endeverafter. If you can recomend any new rock bands I would really like to check em' out but the only ones I see dont really have much to offer.

The criticism is helpful though, I do know what your saying.
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Old 03-13-2008, 05:44 PM   #11 (permalink)
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Airbourne TELL people they're Accadacadda fans and they want to emulate them... That's what make them so f**king great!!

no brainer rock 'n' roll, no fancy time signatures and full on party rock 'n'n roll... Same with AC/DC and Andrew W.K. ...


Don't get me wrong, I love the thinking lyrics but sometimes I want to get into 'Beavis and Butthead' mode and just headbang with a beer and this is where it all come into play.


As for new bands, here's a few Mancunian bands I know... I'm not in any of them.

www.myspace.com/dearsuperstar
- Dear Superstar: Motley Crue style sleaze 'n' roll

www.myspace.com/sevenyearsdeadmusic
- SevenYearsDead: Machine Head meets Love/Hate meets Pantera meets Skid Row meets SevenYearsDead

www.myspace.com/profane
- Profane: Melodic tech/hardcore metal

www.myspace.com/figmoband
- F.I.G.M.O. (pronounced FIGMO) - Imagine 'The Trooper' by Maiden or 'Battle Hymn' by Manowar galloping stuff mixed with Metallica?

www.myspace.com/speedtheory
- Speedtheory: This band are actually from the Midlands (Birmingham)
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Old 03-15-2008, 12:37 PM   #12 (permalink)
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Airbourne rock, gonna see them march 30th.

btw- Why do you keep on referring to ACDC as Accadacadda?
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Old 03-20-2008, 01:48 PM   #13 (permalink)
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Im not into metal but i like the lyrics i want to learn how to write songs of different genres
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Old 03-27-2008, 01:45 PM   #14 (permalink)
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I like the lyric's story, and it's deep of course. although I detect an english grammar error "Get real, its no better" is actually ASL (american Sign Language) Grammar. this is better "Get real, it won't get better."

let me say for the record, every stanzas you wrote are completely true about the world.
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Old 03-28-2008, 02:42 PM   #15 (permalink)
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Thanks man!

The 'Get real, its no better' part is supposed to be part of a sentence, as in "Get real, its no better to ignore the world around you". She thinks that ignoring her problems by drinking them away is better then facing them head on.

I dont know if it makes a difference but thats just how I intended to sing the lyrics.
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Old 04-19-2008, 10:18 PM   #16 (permalink)
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'Get real, quit ignorin'
the pain is there to stay
this is goodbye, its all over
Cause you're just wasting away'

Get real, quit ignorin'
the pain that's there to stay
goodbye, it's all over
I know you're wastin' away'

better? worse?
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Old 04-20-2008, 01:24 PM   #17 (permalink)
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Better. Much better.

Wow, this is ridiculous.. Too deep? You know, kids, the world goes far beyond the surface. HellBellsLiveWire, your lyrics are great, your style refined, and your abilities definitely to par. I just think it'd be important to state that much.

If you're going for hard rock: Yeah, this seems about right. I actually imagined that sort of style the first time I heard it.

The hard rock fanbase has grown ultimately more sophisticated over the years, most of us appreciate lyrics that reflect the intelligent side of humanity.
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Old 05-07-2008, 07:28 PM   #18 (permalink)
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Yea, I agree. I think that there are just so many bands out there today that you have to work hard and make sure everything you do is the best that it could be to get recognized. I have a killer chorus planned for this song, so I'll just have to work on it a little more.
Any other criticisms would be helpful... and sorry for the shameless bump!
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