please review

[fighttest89]

lyrics to an as-of-yet-untitled song.

with your tongue free of teeth you'll scream satellites
and swallow a sun that never shines
your eyes swelled to immeasurable size
raining on us it feels
like love
like love
like love

any feedback is appreciated.

[HellBellsLiveWire]

Sounds like an amphigory to me. Im sorry if that's unkind, I just have no idea what the meaning of these lyrics are.

[argo26]

with your tongue free of teeth you'll scream satellites

Great line pal, great line. It's an epic image that reminds me of Mars Volta.