Not longer pretending

[xMargoot]

When you finally are going to move
Make no footsteps in the snow
Cause you can save yourself a bit longer
By hiding you and spare yourself a show

They hear every word you say
And every breathe you take
They feel your fear and pain
It will be the last mistake you make

How long do you think that you can pretend that this isn’t the end?
You need to realize that there are people out there that you can’t defend
Now your eyes are full of quilt
You can’t expect me to trust you anymore
But I’ll always remember the time before
Just save me the last dance, so I can say goodbye and close this door

They hear every word you say
And every breathe you take
They feel your fear and pain
It will be the last mistake you make

Watch out! They are here!
They feel that they have become your greatest fear.
There is no escape now

[atmaster]

Excellent poem! I made a few changes to correct some grammatical errors and hopefully improve the flow.

When you finally have to move
Make no footsteps in the snow
You’ll save yourself a bit longer
If you hide and let nothing show

They’ll hear every word you say
And every breathe that you take
If they feel your fear and pain
It will be the last mistake you make

How long do you can pretend that this isn’t the end?
Too late you realized the actions you can’t defend
Now your eyes are full of guilt
So don't expect me to trust you anymore
I’ll always remember the times before
Just save me the last dance, so I can say goodbye and close this door

They’ll hear every word you say
And every breathe that you take
If they feel your fear and pain
It will be the last mistake you make

Watch out! They are here!
They sense your greatest fear.
There is no escape now

[xMargoot]

Thanks for your comment!
But don't you think that the meaning of the lyric is changed now?
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[atmaster]

My suggested changes were intended to be an example of a more measured and even flow/format and should be taken as just one possible direction.

However, I wasn't sure about the meaning of the opening couplet of the third verse so I may have inadvertantly modified the desired direction of your poem. Can you help me understand the intent of this couplet?