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Old 05-22-2008, 02:52 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Cool first lyrics
hay my first lyrics bit stuck though tell ma what u think so far



walked through the station rubbing my eys
turn around and to my surprise
i saw your face smilling i saw the light
and all of a suden i got a fright


felt my insides shake to the core
lightening hits me from the heavens
angels roar
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Old 06-13-2008, 08:55 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Very Very Very very Verrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr rrrrryyyyyyyyyyyy short.
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Old 06-15-2008, 05:50 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Ummm... a little too kindergarten poem, "to my suprise' 'i got a fright'. Also, it doesn't have to ryhme perfectly, like 'me' and 'street' and 'passion' and 'happened'. It still sounds good when it's sung. To write my lyrics I find some good music to write the song to first, that gives me a good structure.
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