a song i wrote, please tell me what you think, i dont know if its ne good

[mrtsligo]

REGRET @

Regret is why i wrote this song,
iv been waiting just so long,
iv told you once, two times now three,
why cant you just be with me

Ur smile makes me fall,
on my knees against the wall
open arms is what i see
why cant you just be with me

your secret was a lie,
i really thought you loved this guy

last night was such a bluff
i love u just not enough ?
your confused , well so am i,
i really thought you loved this guy

everytime i look at you,
i think of what we used to do,
all the things you said for fun,
like being the father of your son,

well things have changed and so have i
i really want to be that guy

[atmaster]

Nice poem. Who says iambic pentameter is dead?

[lyricsfromtheheart]

I like it alot. Hey at least you can rhyme i cant rhyme worth crap

[music fanatic]

That's awesome. Truely, awesome.

[mrtsligo]

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