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Old 06-09-2008, 11:52 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Default a song i wrote called horrible kiss

i got so hyped up before 7th period
because i knew that something more
than just a hug would hapen
oh we walked out he front door and
stopped at the buses
then you pulled the expected

(chorus #1)
a horrible kiss (yeah3x)
now that i said something geuess ill have to explain (yeah3x)
it started with licking your lips leaning in and landing one on my kisser (Yeah3x)
not to mention it was hot and it tasted like sweat (yeah3x)
dont want to think about it (Yeah3x)
that horrible kiss

i was watching tv and they were kissing romantically
so i thought that i could give you a second chance
before i start making a list of guys to kiss
now im on my front porch steps
when it happens again

(chorus #2)
a horrible kiss (yeah3x)
now that i said something geuess ill have to explain (yeah 3x)
it started with licking your lips leaning in and landing one on my kisser (Yeah3x)
then you forgot where my head is and bumped into it (yeah3x)
dont want to think about it (Yeah3x)
that horrible kiss

now im wondering inside
if the feeling the same way that i did

that horrible kiss (yeah3x)
it changed everthing (Yeah3x)
cause i am not sure if its ok not to like kissing your BF (yeah 3x)

that horribe kiss, kiss, kiss
that horrible kis (yeah2x)
kiss(10x)

that horrible kiss
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please reply back and tell me what you think! i am only 13 and have been writing songs since i was about ten, oh and judge hard you wont hurt my feelings!

Last edited by lyricsfromtheheart : 06-12-2008 at 12:00 AM. Reason: it was only supposed to be yeah 3x
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Old 06-11-2008, 10:02 AM   #2 (permalink)
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I think it would be good as like a techno song maybe? Just with all those repeats it seems like that would fit. Also, I would be glad to help you find some rhymes since you don't think you're very good at rhyming.
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Old 06-11-2008, 01:29 PM   #3 (permalink)
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kinda what i thought me and a friend wrote this one night because we were really bored.
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Old 06-11-2008, 09:34 PM   #4 (permalink)
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Ugh.... You repeat practically everything 3 times!
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Old 06-11-2008, 11:58 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Ugh.... You repeat practically everything 3 times!
Sorry it is supposed to just be yeah3x, yea me and my friend put this on here just to be funny but i will change some of it.
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Old 06-15-2008, 07:06 AM   #6 (permalink)
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It's not funny, it's freakin hilarious!
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