My song :"Falling Apart"

Acheramee · 07-19-2008, 10:14 AM

OK, this is just one of a lot of songs I've written. You're in for it!

“Falling Apart”

It’s been an empty day
I think it over tonight
Nothing’s going to change
And it’s just a waste of time
But in the thought of leaving
Makes it hurt even more
But there is no seeing
There’s nothing to hope for

Cho. It’s falling apart
And I’m breaking
It was in my heart
And now it’s waking
After all I’ve been through
It’s waiting on a cue
I’m never going to win
And I know, I can’t give in
So I’ll trust in You
I’ll trust in You

I’m so drained of emotions
So that I can’t even cry
Yet you’re the one I hope in
So I guess I won’t die
With pain and trouble calling
I can’t figure it out
I know you’ll keep me from Falling
I know you’ll keep me from doubt

Cho

I’m holding on
For one more day
It won’t be gone
I f I run away
I’m holding on
To what You said
It won’t be gone
Unless I’m dead
All the tears I’m crying
Are never going to go
There’s no proof in lying
So I guess, I’ll never know

Cho

smileforme_emily · 07-23-2008, 09:11 PM

i really really really like this.
what does cho mean? :/

Acheramee · 07-24-2008, 07:02 AM

He he, it means chorus.

NaChO · 07-25-2008, 08:54 AM

it's really good

Acheramee · 07-25-2008, 09:03 AM

really?? thanks so much

Tracy-Turnblad · 07-25-2008, 01:10 PM

I love it! It's awesome! Please post more of your 125 songs

Acheramee · 07-25-2008, 02:02 PM

Thanks. I will. I just posted one yesterday. I'm not working on any one right now. Which is unusual. Pretty soon however I'm going to be going to a Christian school, which means not as much time to write. I'm bummed out.

Smaltonian · 07-28-2008, 02:22 PM

Well....I'm guessing it's a Ballad....and a sad one at that...

I think your Chorus doesn't straight follow I'M FALLING APART....you get off track....stick to only FALLING APART....It's waking is OPPOSITE of FALLING APART

How about aching instead.....That line threw me...

Other parts look good...just that bothered me...

Steve Altonian

Acheramee · 07-28-2008, 09:52 PM

Well, the part "It was in my heart and now it's waking" has a personal significance. Something me, and even my family went through. The whole song refers to that. This part" it’s just a waste of time But in the thought of leaving Makes it hurt even more But there is no seeing
There’s nothing to hope for" was a part that meant a big deal. The chorus is something I'll keep as it is. Thanks for the tip though.

Rabbitdrive · 07-29-2008, 06:06 AM

lub it. :P

Acheramee · 07-29-2008, 11:11 AM

Thanks

Ninja TK · 07-30-2008, 02:22 AM

Ah, a beautiful song indeed.
I like this one :P
Especially this part of the chorus:

"It’s falling apart
And I’m breaking
It was in my heart
And now it’s waking"

I don't know why, but it stands out and I really like it.
Anyway, great work.
Keep it up.

-TK

Acheramee · 07-30-2008, 08:57 AM

Thanks. that was one of my favorite parts too. So, again, thanks.

smileforme_emily · 08-06-2008, 11:16 PM

oh, haha
i feel stupid!
i thought it was like slang..
(:

Acheramee · 08-09-2008, 06:05 PM

What was slang?

Tracy-Turnblad · 08-17-2008, 02:42 PM

I had an idea for a tune for the part "I'm holding on for one more day...so I guess i'll never know" and it sounded really good, so I used it as the chorus to write a song. I hope that's OK. I'll post it, but not right now. It's called hold on.