I can only Dream: PLEASE REVIEW

this is one of the first songs i wrote. Hope you like it!

I Can Only Dream

Here comes life again with his pistol
And he’s ready to shoot her down
Maybe it’s the best for us all
We won't have to deal with her mistakes.

Words like bruises she was used to
But now she’s bleeding and can’t stop
Another sleepless night she’s wondering
Is it true? Is love not real?

Chorus:
I can see a world of laughter
Where no one has to cry
I can feel the warmth of sunshine
And the love I never had
So close I could reach for it
But the shadows pull me back
So I can only dream
Of this world in fantasies

She’s letting go, she’s fading gradually
Will you be there before she’s gone?
Teardrops clutch remains of fleeting dreams
That you could hear her when she screams

And chase away the fears that darkness hides,
Drown her in your pool of light,
Be the one to save her from the night
But it’s too late for that all

Chorus
Ending:
I can see a world of laughter
Where no one has to cry
I can feel the warmth of sunshine
And the love I never had
Maybe someday this will be reality

Enticing.

I like it.

Thank you

When I read these I think of Flyleaf; for some reason I could imagine this being one of their songs. Sorry if you hate Flyleaf but I mean it nicely lol
I think you've got some good lyrics there. I like the images and the vocabulary. It's also not a depressing thing to read because you've shown the hope in it, which is great!

thanks Is there anything I need to do to improve?

um... I'm not saying to change it or anything but I was a bit unsure about what you meant when you were saying "maybe it's best for us all" when I read it over again there. Now, don't get me wrong, it is late and I haven't slept right in a week so it could be just me lol
I wouldn't really change too much about these lyrics; they're good as they are.

oh ok