I will make it - my song but i need help with the chorus =]

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  1. lil poetry said:

    Default I will make it - my song but i need help with the chorus =]

    this a lil rap song i wrote people but need help with the chorus cause i cudnt come up wit any thing smart, catchy or even just plain........so if ya can an wan ta please help an leave comments

    Say ma name, say ma name cause I’m about to drop
    I’m gonna enter this game and make my way to the top
    and aint nothing taking me down cause I’m headed uptown
    a new legend born, hip hops hero, I’m off to claim my crown
    unfazed, don’t forget haters what goes around comes around
    soon I’ll be a name everybody know
    competition I’ll huff, puff and blow
    you’ll be amazed with how well I flow
    how well I rhyme, the meaning of my words
    and the message I bring across
    I’m here to tell you no matter what I will make it
    we can make it, no matter what colour you can make it
    you just gotta commit that’s why I give my all, spit legit
    therefore I will never fall but instead stand tall
    as I show the world what I’m all about
    the talent I hold, running for the gold, now the story unfolds

    CHORUS????

    I’m here bout to show you me, about to do my business
    still sleeping so I dream big, possibilities endless, painless
    action less and you will get nowhere
    that’s why I talk about what I know, what I feel, spit legit
    I don’t brag about things I don’t have, don’t see the point
    in tryna disappoint the viewers, listeners and potential buyers
    they want to know real, how I feel, true emotions I will reveal
    rip my chest open, in order for my music to appeal
    to each and every one of them like the talents of Eminem
    he gets them sitting back and listening to his words
    he could go a whole song without swearing and still sell a million records
    making himself a legend as from everyone he receives handfuls of awards
    so all you have to do is commit that’s why I give my all, spit legit
    therefore I will never fall but instead stand tall
    as I show the world what I’m all about
    the talent I hold, running for the gold, now the story unfolds

    CHORUS???

    now the dream starts with a pen in my hand
    the future planned out here I stand
    cause sometimes you just gotta believe
    cause talent can only get that far
    life is full of surprises even if its planned
    that’s why nothing is ever for granted
    so I expect to be rejected and neglected
    but fate has it I will be respected
    resurrected, in the history books I’ll be expected
    cause why compete if you don’t want to win
    why compete if you’re just gonna accept defeat
    who wants to be remembered as a has been
    that’s why to my work I commit, give my all, never quit
    therefore I will never fall but instead stand tall
    as I show the world what I’m all about
    the talent I hold, running for the gold, now the story unfolds
  2. Jean1singer said:

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    well it's not my style of lyrics, though I like listening to rap, if I knew how to write rap I would help, sorry.
  3. soulessdarknight said:

    Post its sumthing

    Well Im not really much of a rapper but I love writing lyrics so I ll give it a try just give me some credit if you make it to the top?

    I'll do whatever it take to make it to the top,
    I drop any mother****er who thinks Im going to flop.
    I will make it, I dont care what it takes,
    Break every bone in your body just to prove your fake.
    I dont have much but i have my mind,
    A lyrical poet who you just cant find.
  4. JimiFloyd said:

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    Those lyrics are pretty lame to be honest, but I think pretty much all rap lyrics that have come out in the last few years are lame.