some random rap lyrics

So I decided to write some hip-hop lyrics to some beats I have lying around. This is a WIP:

Alright alright let's get this started.

You're like a hopeless dreamer, staring in divine light,
You suffer from hindsight from this assigned fight,
Your bars are benign, while I recite malign shite,
You're alligned to the sidelines, you're just a fleabite;
I'm on my feet like a feline, rolling in the twilight,
I designed the guideline, you can't get it timed right,
Infinite crimes I indict, hip-hop in daylight;
My lyrics define and refine - highlight the limelight.

I'm the cashmere to your linen - much to your disdain,
I jeer at your fear, I'm ruling your domain,
The final frontier, the feigned membrane
of society's ***** mundane monarch reign;
Revere the shakesperean bloodstain, inane pain,
Lyrics restrained, appear to be insane,
To the naked ear, profanity remains;
For my homies' peer, my melody regains.


what do you think?

bumping this topic

Crap... Utter crap

Far too many rhyming couplets

Originally Posted by Ultimate_Worrier

Crap... Utter crap

Far too many rhyming couplets

hahahah what the hell, if you're gonna stay on your ****ing high horse at least ELABORATE!
do you even understand the lyrics? can you not see the multis are for flow and that they flow alright?


man what the hell are you versed in how rap works? this is not sung it's rapped you idiot! jesus christ go back to your **** THE WORLDS I CUT MYSELF lyrics.

no its good well done

Originally Posted by serrated_colon

hahahah what the hell, if you're gonna stay on your ****ing high horse at least ELABORATE!

I don't have a high horse, I borrowed one of someone else but had to give it back.

do you even understand the lyrics? can you not see the multis are for flow and that they flow alright?

I passed English A levels, I majored in music A levels
I'm a producer, a drummer and a lyricist, I've also forgotton more music than you've probaably known. from everyone from Stevie Wonder to Slayer... 2pac to Therapy?... Anthrax to Arthur Brown.

man what the hell are you versed in how rap works? this is not sung it's rapped you idiot!

1. I never said it was sung, I said it has too many rhyming couplets you illiterate.
Rap isn't supposed to be retarded, it's supposed to have a message, a meaning, a right to be there, to stand up and be counted, telling everyone against it to shut the f**k up and back the f**k down. You just picked a few words and made the rest of the sentence by fitting similar sounding noises together.

2. I'm 31 years old... I listen to the following:

NWA
Ice T
Ice Cube
Dr. Dre
Cypress Hill
Snoop Dog
Nate Dogg
Run DMC
Public Enemy
Grandmaster Flash & The Furious 5
Sugarhill Gang

And have listened to them since I was 14 so no, I have no idea about rap or hip hop... *sigh*

jesus christ go back to your **** THE WORLDS I CUT MYSELF lyrics.

That's kinda laughable coming from someone called "Serrated_Colon" - Not the most un-Slipknot name, is it?

I kinda get the feeling you're confusing me with some 13 year old Marilyn Manson fan, not the 31 year old thrash/death/industrial metal fan I actually am.

My music is written about life outside four walls - Not one of the bands I listen to has ever written about cutting themselves or how sh*t the world is... They
might write about how sh*t the government is or how sh*t people treat the world but they're generally happy with the world as it is and are far too happy to cut themselves.


What I think you're doing is generalising everyone who's not into your music and labelling them as some 13 year old Marylin Manson fan. you need to shut up and stop being some internet warrior, open your eyes and learn what's what.

Now, if you wish to continue this verbal debacle we can do, hell, I can make you look stupid as many ways as you like but all I did was give you what you asked for: Opinions of your lyrics and elaboration when required... If you can't accept this then that's not my problem, is it?

Hang on a minute?

1. He asks for an opinion
2. I give him an opinion
3. He calls me a ton of names, says I know nothing about rap and asks for elaboration
4. I give him an elaboration, show him how much I know about rap and make him look stupid


and my post is destroyed!?!?!?!


Seems to me I'm the only one here with any cajones to givfe a proper retort when I'm questioned.

Thanks Mods - Militants

How is a request off topic when on here is the only way I can get an answer seeing as the mods ignore anything I send via PM?

I cannot get a decent response as you all seem to think I'm Satan

hey the eskimo look at this post i'm farah

this stuff isn't plagiarised or nothing