another member wanted help with a song, this is what i came up with. comment please!

[Tracy-Turnblad]

straightTop asked for help writting a song to say to someone: i loved you before you broke my heart but now im fine and loving life

This is what i came up with, please comment

You lied but i don't care

once upon a time
I was walking under street lights when I caught your eye
we caught onto something
we talked right through the night
I new right from that minute
that we'd fall in love

And then it happened just as I had thought
Just so in love with you
I couldn't love you more
told me to meet you Friday
so come Friday i'm waiting
under street lights where I met you
but you don't turn up at all

and i'm still trying to phone
you won't take my call
and now I feel so low you can't help me anymore
and I flash back to when you said you'd always be there
You lied but I don't care

And my world's all broken, everything's gone wrong
My heart is broken, now you've up and gone
cause I was there when you said you'd always be there
You lied but I don't care

Did you find someone else?
Did you leave me suddenly just to protect yourself?
From dating two girls

So here's to everything
Coming down to nothing
Here's to silence
That cut me the core
Now i'm over this, I only new you for a minute
I just don't anymore

so if you try to phone
I won't take your call
cuz you made me feel so low you can't help me anymore
and I flash back to when you said you'd always be there
You lied but I don't care

you lied and I cried
and you said you'd be there
and you left me, didn't bother
to tell me it's over
but boy, I don't care

[TheCrumbledMind]

I dont like love songs and all that But this is good. Nice job.