Strong relationship

Song I made just after "What did I do".

As beautiful as the hair you swing around
It's like I've been fully blessed for having such a girl like you come around
I love you baby when you run around, it feels so safe
so speechless as you take my breath away
feels like we're in a world of our own
Be the queen of my heart and never let go
Touch the heart and forever stay, though.
Stand under the mistletoe,
And let me take you through a night that'll never be forgotten!..
I said a night that'll never be forgotten!
(Oh!)

(CHORUS)
(Whoa!)
When our hearts combine it's like a world that shines!
Through the rough times you'll always be mine!
Thinking of you, non-stop and I know that things are all fine!
Singing to you when you're down, and rising a smile on your face
stroking your cheeks through the weak spots and I'm sure everything will be fine..
Everything will be fine.

You know,
When I see you it always lightens up my day
Holding hands tightly resting your head on my shoulder
Life cannot be better than having my girl next to me everyday..
Winter comes with snowflakes falling n breaking apart
I'd come and fix you and always be ready to catch you
till i'm apart of you


Snowy mornings,
Sun rising up with the snow melting on the ground (mm..)
Oh, and I'm up and theres no trouble to say if you're okay
Door snowed in, looks like we'll be staying here for longer
Gunna make her something eat while our relationship gets stronger
Watching her wake up with a smile on my face
Saying good morning baby how yah feeling
Goes over to kiss her with a script I wrote
Saying I love you baby and You're what I desired!!

(CHORUS)
(Whoa!)
When our hearts combine it's like a world that shines!
Through the rough times you'll always be mine!
Thinking of you, non-stop and I know that things are all fine!
Singing to you when you're down, and rising a smile on your face
stroking your cheeks through the weak spots and I'm sure everything will be fine..
Everything will be fine.


I've got the time to go where ever with you babe..
(Yeah)
We can climb the cliffs in summer looking at the view
Such an amazing sight thou I'm thinking of you
Another script almost about due..
My heart skips a beat that my love for you is deep
And it's a love story that isn't so cheap
That isn't so cheap
(Mm..)

You've moved to the next stage up
That there'll be no such thing as breakups
Laying on the beach with sunset coming
And you're ontop of me and there's nothing to compare
Curling the smoothnes hair of yours and kissing you fair
Rolling you on the sides touching your thighs and girl,
I'll always care!!
Always care!


(Whoa!)
When our hearts combine it's like a world that shines!
Through the rough times you'll always be mine!
Thinking of you, non-stop and I know that things are all fine!
Singing to you when you're down, and rising a smile on your face
stroking your cheeks through the weak spots and I'm sure everything will be fine..
Everything will be fine...

So uh..

Talking to you on the phone now,
Able to hear your soft cute voice on the phone now,
Always sends a tingling feeling down my spine that I love now.
Has always been hard saying goodbyes on the phone now..
Yet come home and see her running..
Putting a smile on her face as I walk through
Jumping on me like and I barely came through..
Hugging and kissing her as I see andrew
Out in the open I see dim skys blew
A thousand bits of the season flowers that grew
Drifting off back in the day but then I met you
I met you

(Whoa!)
When our hearts combine it's like a world that shines!
Through the rough times you'll always be mine!
Thinking of you, non-stop and I know that things are all fine!
Singing to you when you're down, and rising a smile on your face
stroking your cheeks through the weak spots and I'm sure everything will be fine..
Everything will be fine.

(Whoa!)
When our hearts combine it's like a world that shines!
Through the rough times you'll always be mine!
Thinking of you, non-stop and I know that things are all fine!
Singing to you when you're down, and rising a smile on your face
stroking your cheeks through the weak spots and I'm sure everything will be fine..
Everything will be fine.
Everything will be fine
If you just stay mine!

(..Mm..)
And I say everything will be fine aslong as you're by my side
And promise me you'll be with me when things collide
Talking amongs't the horizon where there lays our first kiss,
on the seaside.

Oh...

I can say that I liked the lyrics but it could be better with more rhyme, you know that rhyme sounds well with music also it is very long maybe could be shorter.
That's all I say, well done, keep writing!

Sorry, but these are quite bad.

A lot of it has no direction or meaning. It just seems to be meaningless cliches that offer no insight whatsoever.

It reminds of something a really bad boyband from the 90's would possibly have released.

And it seems to be unreasonably long. If you've got nothing to say, at least keep it short, don't drag it out. It's not how many lines you write. It's what the one's you do write mean.

I apologise if english is not your first language, as it does seem to be written with a very naive structure and without any subtlety.