Please leave honest feedback on my lyrics. The 1st one is incomplete

My infinite hypothesis workin like Stephanopoulos/
Sayin it how I see it truthfully, minus the politics/
Common sense, we lost it since we traded it for dollars and cents/
The benjamins have made us break away from our true essences/
Overrun with selfishness, the mirror’s where your effort is/
Compression of the soul makes for feelings of inner detriment/
Materialism got ya like a deadly spiritual pestilence/
(Pause, reset so my next rhyme flows properly)


Metaphysical medicinal properties that I’ve learned/
Like a modern witch doctor switchin’ rituals with words/
Shamanism in lyricism the schism is deterred/
Unifying fellow man one with the universe/


(I’ll post the finished rhyme later if you, the fans, recommend it. Thanks)



Next lyric

The art form we all love so much is in a state of influx/
but it’s in vain as I watch disgust/
With bust after bust steadily makin thru/
You wanna sell a milli? Come up some with a juvenile dance move/
or construct a rhyme and just repeat the chorus through and through/
And no one has a clue, hip-hop is now in ICU/
Im sittin in the waitin room hoping it’ll make it/
In a battle for its life because so many rappers faked it/
Repeatedly forsaken in the name of the dollar/
Its chances of survival are diminishing by the hour/
The power of the greenback shouldn’t be too hard to see/
A state of renaissance is where the art now ought to be/
U see that lyrical rhymes aren’t much too hard for me/
But record execs choose quantity over quality/
Rhymes from the heart, you see, are few and far between/
3 million records sold now for the Carter 3 /
moderate success seems to be eluding me/
I guess ima keep it comin from the heart for free/
It takes no heart get your rhymes on MTV/
And show the world the that you’re clearly lackin intellectually/
Or telling kids bout how u active sexually/
I know it sounds like I’m preachin but it’s better to be/
A disciple, as opposed to a Pharisee/
never mind I’m speakin heresy, not a believer/
Life’s too short to dedicate it to deceivers/
7 figure church buildings tell me why do they need this?/
Then comes the collection plate, money for Jesus/
Please this, is ridiculous son don’t bother me/
I won’t put a penny towards pushin mythology/
To the 3rd world run down with poverty/
The cost of a mission trip is approximately/
100 grand large, please stop the crockery/
You makin a mockery of my righteous apostasy/
theology forever intertwined with debauchery/
every day hypocrisy got the people lost at sea/
Pro-lifers sent Tookie to the reaper disingenuously/
I guess life is only sacred when it’s most convenient/
At birth its cool but after that they’re not so lenient/
In wartime it seems as though life sanctity disappears/
benjamins by way of oil makes elites change gears/
Trade tears of army wives and children/
For defense contracts and expansion of Americanized imperialism/
False flag terrorism is their M.O./
McVeigh, 9/11, and the patriots of Waco/
Yes you heard correct the Branch Davidians were on your side/
They got their hands on major dirt against the FBI/
Computer files with plans for pedophil-I-A
CIA transference of cocaine, dirty money,/
Black ops agents on Buffalo Planes/
You gotta refrain from this sheep mentality plague/
And reclaim the rightful regulation of your brain/

2 more in my next thread