My first rap

[AtownsFinest09]

Just want your oppinion, and some tips

Yo Yo Im ATowns finest, everybody like me cuz im the best rhymist. You aint like me cuz ima better rapper. yo boyz always tryin to get high and ride wit me but i aint like dat, i jus like to look fly and ride the streets. Next time yall try to be slick and steal my ****, Instead of having your ***** suck my ****, ill have her bend over and ill **** that *****. Or if she opens her moutch ill **** her brains out. And the next time i see you when you open your mouth, Ill put my 45 in and blow your brains out. So next time you try to **** wit me, make sure you know your ****in wit ATowns ****in best rhymist.


let me know wat yall think.

[PhatChris]

ehh... work on it
in my personal opinion you sware too much for that small amount of bars
also, "yo yo" is a bad choice of words, nobody will take you serious if u dont expand your vocabulary
if your gonna rap then listen to these people to get a feel of what you should sound like: lil wayne, drake, lupe fiasco, joel ortiz, joe budden, freeway, and cassidy... these artists know how to use metaphores, stay on a beat, and think of some pretty hott **** if ya get wut im sayin... lol
but yea.. keep workin on it

[razvy2]

Originally Posted by AtownsFinest09

Just want your oppinion, and some tips

Yo Yo Im ATowns finest, everybody like me cuz im the best rhymist. You aint like me cuz ima better rapper. yo boyz always tryin to get high and ride wit me but i aint like dat, i jus like to look fly and ride the streets. Next time yall try to be slick and steal my ****, Instead of having your ***** suck my ****, ill have her bend over and ill **** that *****. Or if she opens her moutch ill **** her brains out. And the next time i see you when you open your mouth, Ill put my 45 in and blow your brains out. So next time you try to **** wit me, make sure you know your ****in wit ATowns ****in best rhymist.


let me know wat yall think.

nice one, you deserve an 8... check also my lyrics and rate them