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"Fear"


(Chorus)
Don’t look me in my eyes, I’ve taken 1 too many lives…
But please don’t be scared of me… Please don’t be scared of me

I would never do, to you what I’ve been through
So please don’t be scared of me… Please don’t be scared of me


[ Verse 1: Tone ]
I don’t pop bottles, so I bottle my emotion
N send it with a letter to the bottom of the ocean
So the next time you won’t see when I’m hurt or hear my cries
But tears were all I had to wash the dirt up out my eyes
Hurt so many times, enough to last me for my life
So I’ll have to reconsider when you ask to be my wife
‘Cause I can’t trust the fact, that you could really act
And make this man believe that you would have his back
But I’ll take it all ‘n’ stride, ‘n’ dismiss what I was feelin’ there
For now I’ll just be me, not this premature millionaire
No more hopin’ for the life of a celebrity
I’m tradin’ in my power, n investin’ in longevity
You might be heavy metal love, but I’m in need of AC
‘Cause it’s hot in California, I don’t be in DC
So you will never see me settle for a “fan” in the summertime
Penny for your thoughts? I’ll keep mine… 'n' save 'em for another dime …

that is some good sh*t! dont let it go to waste

Thanks Henry, still working on it...

nice! keep editing, dont give up yet, thats what i did before to some sick raps, dont make the same mistake i did!

id like to hear the rest

Awesome mate! as always!