Me Caught in Rhythm(complete version)please comment

Ill be living and lusting and trusting and busting and fussing and listening to music that soothes the bruises that hurt and that burn in my soul as they stirr the anger's not controled

im realeased
im unleahed
im untamed like a beast
that brings pain to its feast
then its slain as it bleeds
then its gone just like that
and its wrong and im fond of it but i cant help it and felt it and i killed it

im alive and i vibe and i cry and i sigh
i will die soon enough but not now cause im ruff
as i breathe i will try to make most of my rhymes
cause im freed i survive
i will always make beats

i compete
im complete
with humanity in me
as i weep a fire ignites a formality
that reaps a desire for me to go higher
some people and normality just dont agree

its been clear why im feared cause i shear and i sear anyone that thinks that they won in a fight which hasnt yet begun
i attack
they try to break from my grasp
but they cant cause im brass
when im raged then they gape and they panic and gasp
then they run but im fast
then theyre stunned as their catched
on the floor they collapse
i hit and the pass
my fist and their face have finally clashed

i get up
walk away
and i say
that revenge has been granted and chanted
as i avenge my spirit
i come with lyrics that explain my position
so listen
no dissin'
just witness the vision

addiction in fights is like s*it that enlights and ignites an ignition in lights that are bright
its my right to shoot ammunition at flights
cause im right everytime i save a life



umm...say it with the instrumentals from "The Way I am-Eminem" and it should sound better!!
oh! and comments are greatly appreciated thnks!

its still a work in progress, so im not done! ill be done by like... a few weeks or so, cause i got other things to do. i just edit it once a week or so! i hope u still enjoyed it though

sorry about the verse rule thingie! just ignore that , just rate on how it currently is

Your understanding of using words as an emotional is excellent! However, if only you had a good beat to this..

I know. i dont make beats though, i gotta i friend to do that for me, i just used this one so he gets the flow.

and isnt the beat that currently is good enough?

wow! 30 ppl saw this and still one comment, excluding mine. which doesnt count

please comment this ppl! i dont like getting views but no comments!!!