are my lyrics good 4 a beginner

yo, i have just started on new lyrics... can u ppl give me some advice?

calm down it ain't nothin but frustrattion
cause it'd da power of determination
in order 4 us to live elimintation
not forgetin further supplication

life it's all just an illusion
all a lie
an illusion of da human eye
all a game
an illusion of da human brain
for us to play apart
an illusion of the human heart

all da war all da hate due to our human nation
all da racial defamation
causin further destruction
and da inevitable superstition
causin all da innocent convictions

it's what we want it 2 be
4 us to be free
a brave man once said to me
float like a butterfly
sting like a bee
cause we either live or we die
and dats da rule of livin life

Yo nice rap man. Really like it. Its not about killing hoes and stuff lol.
I really like the lyrics. Definitely a 10 for me.
Rate mine when you can.

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