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Thread: Wastin' Away (29 Replies, 10,190 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
Any new users willing to give a review? Havent been on here in a while
Thread: Wastin' Away (29 Replies, 10,190 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
You're right Ultimate Worrier, Im so Dumb and you're so smart.
And thanks SewnUp : )
Thread: My Last Goodbye (2 Replies, 2,026 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
Very nice lyrics. Everybody questions fate and reality, so people could really relate to them.
Thread: Criticize my lyrics. (1 Replies, 1,173 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
Pretty dark lyrics. Out of all of them I like the last set you had. What genre is it?
Thread: Wastin' Away (29 Replies, 10,190 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
So, in your opinion the lyrics are too deep then?
Well I disagree, plenty of Hard Rock artists have deep and meaningful lyrics. It isnt a requirement in Hard Rock to have simple lyrics etc.
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Thread: Song About Hannah Montana (9 Replies, 2,158 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
Hannah is lame
So is her dad
I'd care a little more
If it werent just a fad
Thread: Inferior Disease (6 Replies, 1,656 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
Thank you = )
Thread: Inferior Disease (6 Replies, 1,656 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
No, It's a story.
Thread: a vision of perfection (10 Replies, 3,366 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
In my opinion, you should use a metaphor and not be so direct with the message.
Thread: Everything's Okay (a song for my family) (2 Replies, 2,179 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
I really like these lyrics, good job. You can tell that they're very genuine and emotionally driven, yet they still have a good flow. Thats a recipe for success and I hope your performance went well.
Thread: little love song (2 Replies, 1,354 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
I like the last three verses, very poetic. The first verse (or is it the chorus?) doesnt fit well. The message of this love song should be that she wants to spend every moment with this guy because...
Thread: Hypocritical? Yes... The answer? No... (comment pretty please!) (3 Replies, 1,086 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
My interpretation of these lyrics is that one person can stand up, let their voice be heard, and make difference. The way you deliver the message is very original and I like that. My only suggestion...
Thread: Inferior Disease (6 Replies, 1,656 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
Just because the song is depressing doesnt mean that it's Emo. I used phrases like 'Life is so cruel' and 'slit my wrists' so I get why you would think that.
Its about a person who has been alone...
Thread: Inferior Disease (6 Replies, 1,656 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
Please, Please, Dont look at me
Im the scum of the earth, an Inferior Disease
Oh please, please, dont talk to me
I'm a bum, I'm a Scum, Inferior Disease
Stuck here alone, I cant live without...
Thread: Can anyone help me with this line? (8 Replies, 2,746 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
It's time to shed this endless diguise
And I'll Regret if I don't try
I must break free from these venomous lies
And I'll regret if I don't try
I must live the days that fade with time
And...
Thread: untitled so far...comment on this..just wrote it (1 Replies, 1,439 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
There is a consistency issue when you say in the first verse that "We are seperate from me to you / For us, there is no cure" and then later "We stand still together
Like a couple of trees / We seem...
Thread: Wastin' Away (29 Replies, 10,190 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
Yea, I agree. I think that there are just so many bands out there today that you have to work hard and make sure everything you do is the best that it could be to get recognized. I have a killer...
Thread: Apokalyptik (29 Replies, 5,276 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
Yeah I saw that Movie Zeitgeist. It was pretty eye opening, but the part about sept. 11th was quite silly to me.
I like the lyrics, but it seems that most of the lyrics you post are pretty much all...
Thread: please review (2 Replies, 1,140 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
Sounds like an amphigory to me. Im sorry if that's unkind, I just have no idea what the meaning of these lyrics are.
Thread: Please Father, Lord. (help me smile) PLZ COMMENT (2 Replies, 1,984 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
Pretty generic christian lyrics.
Advice- you sound juvenile when you use words like 'Stupid' and 'Bad.
Try to use more vivid adjectives. remember 'Show, don't tell'.
Thread: Wastin' Away (29 Replies, 10,190 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
'Get real, quit ignorin'
the pain is there to stay
this is goodbye, its all over
Cause you're just wasting away'
Get real, quit ignorin'
the pain that's there to stay
goodbye, it's all over...
Thread: I Looked Twice! (112 Replies, 23,456 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
lol, you cant say h.o.e?
Thread: yo check out me spitz init n add ur own,snd (15 Replies, 5,542 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
i do a line
off my babyz bhind
and I smok 2 jointz fo' free
cuz im 1 bad mother
so lets do echother
u know im hung lik tommy lee
lets get down
hit up ths *****in town
cause a riot all up...
Thread: Over and Done (Comments and Constructive Criticism!) (6 Replies, 1,399 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
Who is the target audience for this song? I cant imagine somebody wanting to hear about how they were taken advantage of and should just give it up, especially when your writing something upbeat, as...
Thread: Some lyrics i wrote plz read be honest (17 Replies, 11,863 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
Very good job in fixing the lyrics. I knew it would flow better in two parts!
Thread: Some lyrics i wrote plz read be honest (17 Replies, 11,863 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
I think the mood of the song changes very dramatically in the bridge, from a happy song to a sad or angry song. First you say that the memories of this person take you back home, then you say he...
Thread: untitled \,,/ (2 Replies, 1,762 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
If its untitled then why dont you call it 'Ride With The Scithe'? Seems like a pretty good title to me.
Thread: Wastin' Away (29 Replies, 10,190 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
Thanks man!
The 'Get real, its no better' part is supposed to be part of a sentence, as in "Get real, its no better to ignore the world around you". She thinks that ignoring her problems by...
Thread: Emptiness (2 Replies, 1,672 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
Thanks, I really appreciate your compliments. And I agree that pedals is better then petals, I just didnt know which word to use.
Thread: Emptiness (2 Replies, 1,672 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
I know there ar far more people posting new threads then people reviewing them, so heres the last set of lyrics im posting. A lot more deep and personal then the last two.
Beautiful rose, sweet...
Thread: The Beginning Of The End (0 Replies, 1,707 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
That last song I posted (Love's a Fairy Tale) was really gay, so heres one thats probably the exact opposite. Its not meant to be poetic or thought-provoking. Just a song to raise your fist to while...
Thread: unfinished (3 Replies, 1,945 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
"Im know for standing tall even though im only six feet
Cause i know if i fall then im going to be lying six feet"
I would change this line to-
Im known for standing tall, When they try to...
Thread: Rules of attraction (8 Replies, 6,091 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
Metal bands use lyrics that are structered like this, but they usually have different subject matter. same goes for hardcore.
"I also said you don't have to write lyrics in a certain way to fit a...
Thread: Rules of attraction (8 Replies, 6,091 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
Its important to know the genre of music so you can read the lyrics the way the writer intended them to be heard. If its supposed to be a spoken word poem, then id say it was a hip-hop/rap song. Im...
Thread: Rules of attraction (8 Replies, 6,091 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
ill assume these are hip hop lyrics. correct? if so theyre pretty good.
Thread: Love's a Fairy Tale (0 Replies, 3,972 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
These lyrics are intended to be hard rock.
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I used to hear songs on the radio
That said love was a losing game...
Thread: Wastin' Away (29 Replies, 10,190 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
Airbourne rock, gonna see them march 30th.
btw- Why do you keep on referring to ACDC as Accadacadda?
Thread: Wastin' Away (29 Replies, 10,190 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
Im not referring to classic lyrics from ACDC, VH, Aerosmith, GNR. I know those lyrics and how great they are. I was talking about all of the newer rock thats out there. Have you heard Airbourne?...
Thread: Wastin' Away (29 Replies, 10,190 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
Yeah but the thing is that everybody can write stupid lyrics about drinking and smoking.
Lets all get High
We Can feel alright
Then we'll get drunk
and get into a fight
and then get some...
Thread: Wastin' Away (29 Replies, 10,190 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
What thrilling responses.
btw these lyrics are supposed to be hard rock (think acdc gnr aerosmith), just to put em' in perspective.
Thread: Razorblade Serenade (11 Replies, 2,196 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
There are alot of lyrics and songs about suicide, and I dont see this one standing out in the crowd. Listen to 'fade to black' by metallica for the cream of the crop.
Besides, emos cutting...
Thread: Insects (3 Replies, 1,652 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
They're good death metal lyrics but I cant imagine them being much else.
Thread: i just wrote this song and would like some feedback on the lyrics (15 Replies, 4,972 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
how come nobody ever writes happy lyrics?
Thread: Imperfect (please give opinions :) ) (33 Replies, 5,431 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
In my opinion you have too many lyrics. You should try telling a story with as few words as possible. Try putting it through a sort of funnel and cut out some of the stuff you dont need. Although im...
Thread: Wastin' Away (29 Replies, 10,190 Views) by HellBellsLiveWire
To feel pleasure, and feel no pain
Aint it humanity's goal?
You gotta do, what you need to do
to fill the hole.
Whether its for love, whether its for money
its just skin you cant shed
so get...