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Thread: Jfam - Rocketeer cover (Far East Movement ft. Ryan Tedder) (0 Replies, 2,329 Views) by Jfam
Ok, so I was listening to this song, the chorus of which i love and I realised how ordinary the rapping was at times over the second and third verses so anyway, cos I love the chorus I decided to...
Thread: Im a 13 year old rapper. so i need some feedback please, im serious with this stuff. (2 Replies, 2,721 Views) by Jfam
One thing I pick up on is that in your rap you just told me to take into account the fact that you're already miles better than me before I rate this rap which is a bit of a put off really :L anyway,...
Thread: Seams Rippin' Sweat Drippin' (4 Replies, 1,978 Views) by Jfam
The ability to critically look at your own work is good, cos it means you'll always keep improving
Thread: Seams Rippin' Sweat Drippin' (4 Replies, 1,978 Views) by Jfam
Seems alright to start actually. I think the idea is to keep writing raps. I think if you just start simple its probably a good idea. No one can be good overnight. It's taken me a year to write a rap...
Thread: "Kind of things"- Final draft, Opinions?? (5 Replies, 1,754 Views) by Jfam
Funnily enough, I first heard j cole the other day. One of the better upcoming rappers I've heard. Being critical, his flow's a little off sometimes as well. Though to be fair, sometimes going off...
Thread: Jfam: 'The Script - For the First Time' rap cover (5 Replies, 2,892 Views) by Jfam
Lol, and i tried that at first. Trouble is the song isn't widely rap covered and no one wants to make one with a hook in it. The best I could find was the instrumental i found, and there were only...
Thread: Jfam: 'The Script - For the First Time' rap cover (5 Replies, 2,892 Views) by Jfam
Well, i did write it to the beat. Trouble is, i can't get a beat with the bit of the original sound i want still left in and i tried Audacity vocal remover which didn't work but tbh i am a real...
Thread: "Kind of things"- Final draft, Opinions?? (5 Replies, 1,754 Views) by Jfam
First of all, from how much you've written that looks like a loooooong verse! Anyway, you wanted us to be critical so here goes: i thought the ideas in the verse were pretty good. On the critical...
Thread: Jfam: 'The Script - For the First Time' rap cover (5 Replies, 2,892 Views) by Jfam
Any opinions?
Thread: Jfam: 'The Script - For the First Time' rap cover (5 Replies, 2,892 Views) by Jfam
I saw British rapper 'Wretch 32' cover this song at a music festival so I thought i'd also give it a go. For the chorus of this song the only original bit left would be the "Ooooo ooo ooo ooo oooo...
Thread: Finished SONG! "Way past due" (6 Replies, 1,820 Views) by Jfam
*using, not Iain, damn iPod :L
Thread: Finished SONG! "Way past due" (6 Replies, 1,820 Views) by Jfam
Oh, ok, sorry, I missed it :L Well, in my opinion the rhymes seem a bit forced, they sometimes seem like you just put a word or a line there to rhyme it. Maybe try to rhyme more than the final...
Thread: Finished SONG! "Way past due" (6 Replies, 1,820 Views) by Jfam
Well, before I review it; was it written to a beat?
Thread: New Song called Damned...Feed back Please.... (9 Replies, 2,715 Views) by Jfam
Nice job man. I could get the flow of this rap just by reading it. You could feel the beats in your writing which was good. I thought your use of the English language was great, you have a wide range...
Thread: Love the way You lie rap redo - Jfam (4 Replies, 2,744 Views) by Jfam
Thanks man. I thought I'd give it a go seeing as I thought the beat was pretty good
Thread: Love the way You lie rap redo - Jfam (4 Replies, 2,744 Views) by Jfam
Yeah, I realised that after I posted it. Verse 3 is verse 2 I typoed a 3 in place of the 2, whoops...
Thread: Love the way You lie rap redo - Jfam (4 Replies, 2,744 Views) by Jfam
Well, im back (and i find i say this a lot) with another rap. This time ive decided i might be good enough to cover and eminem ft. Rihanna song so jere's my re-write to Love the Way You Lie, two...
Thread: 2nd rap i wrote yesterday! Opinions? (2 Replies, 2,011 Views) by Jfam
Sometimes it takes a while for us on this forum to get back to you. I only check once or twice a day.
I thought your rap once again showed promise, I felt strangely like it was a love song in rap. I...
Thread: Written in the Stars rap remake - Jfam. Comments? (5 Replies, 3,452 Views) by Jfam
Lol, you really think it's that good?
Thread: New Song! i wrote it Today...take a look at it PLEASE!! (3 Replies, 1,895 Views) by Jfam
Umm.. I thought the flow was off in patches but what I could definitely see was that you have some potential. You had some points of good rapping, particulary the first half of verse two I thought...
Thread: No chorus just punchlines and verses (2 Replies, 2,493 Views) by Jfam
I think you got some good stuff in there. I think at points you have some nice bars. At points I thought the flow could be improved but as I said, there are some nice bars in there
Thread: Chasing Dreams (2 Replies, 2,017 Views) by Jfam
Great rap man. I thought it had a great impact, good flow and feel. I thought this rap just had some real connection to you and it was like, your thoughts in rap, which is exactly what great raps can...
Thread: Written in the Stars rap remake - Jfam. Comments? (5 Replies, 3,452 Views) by Jfam
Ahahahaha! I do try :)
Thread: Beat tomorrow (2 Replies, 1,436 Views) by Jfam
Nice rap. Your use of the English language is awesome: some of the words you use...
I also thought the rhymes were nice and good use of in rhymes and multis :) I also thought your flow was good....
Thread: Written in the Stars rap remake - Jfam. Comments? (5 Replies, 3,452 Views) by Jfam
Ok, so I'm back again with a cover of Tinie Tempah's written in the stars (I've only redone the rap part). This rap was done to the Written in the Stars instrumental with hook which can be found on...
Thread: First Rap...opinions? (3 Replies, 1,752 Views) by Jfam
Some other things to try to improve your writing (if you don't do them already):
1. I would write to a beat, I know for a fact that when I started writing to a beat it worked wonders for my flow
2....
Thread: Dreams (first rap, opinions please) (4 Replies, 2,076 Views) by Jfam
Oh, basically they're multiple rhymes. Tbh I'm not the best at explaining them. Basically like where you've written "the downtrodden...rotten. I think it's best to search it up really cos as you can...
Thread: Dreams (first rap, opinions please) (4 Replies, 2,076 Views) by Jfam
Well, this is a very good attempt at a first rap. I thought it had a nice flow and good use of multis and good use of vocabulary. I would definitely keep writing cos I think you have some potential...
Thread: Booty Bounce (15 Replies, 3,717 Views) by Jfam
I shall message you in some way or another :)
Thread: 'The Devils Tears'< Im 12 years old. Only a quick thing. And sorry, not many multis:/ (1 Replies, 2,028 Views) by Jfam
I liked the first half, I thought the rhymes were good there but I lost the flow in the latter half. I thought you did quite well there, I thought the rhymes were good and the flow was ok. Overall a...
Thread: Booty Bounce (15 Replies, 3,717 Views) by Jfam
No :L depending on what you mean really. What you managed to say was that you enjoyed reading ME, not my lyrics :L it's like if I said "i like reading Molotova". Sounds a bit weird really :L I get...
Thread: Booty Bounce (15 Replies, 3,717 Views) by Jfam
You like reading me? :L
Thread: Booty Bounce (15 Replies, 3,717 Views) by Jfam
Meh, at least I know for sure now :)
I'm gonna have to start posting a bit more; I've been inactive for a little while now
Thread: Booty Bounce (15 Replies, 3,717 Views) by Jfam
Lol, I didn't think you'd put that in there yourself :L
Thread: Booty Bounce (15 Replies, 3,717 Views) by Jfam
The rap's pretty nice, though somehow it reminds me of Fergie from the Black Eyed Peas :L
Anyway, i must say, the "let me see your booty bounce" bit really seems to bore me a bit, but of course,...
Thread: Take a Stand - New rap by Jfam. What do you think? (0 Replies, 2,681 Views) by Jfam
Ok, so I know I have been absent for a while, I've been busy and what not and haven't really found the time to rap (or rather haven't made time to rap) but I did put the time to some use: I spent...
Thread: My first full 16 bars plus a few (1 Replies, 3,089 Views) by Jfam
It certainly ain't a bad start. I can see you got it in you to write a decent rap. I thought the flow was generally off and on, some bits flowed really well while others didn't at all. I thought the...
Thread: Need Help!!!!! and insight (2 Replies, 1,375 Views) by Jfam
Well, I think the rhymes are goodish, but I feel the flow is kinda out, like one minute you've got really long lines and then suddenly really short lines and sometimes I don't think your rhymes flow...
Thread: I'm back... (8 Replies, 1,824 Views) by Jfam
I try to review where I can :) and it appears that Molotova has missed you :L
Thread: I'm back... (8 Replies, 1,824 Views) by Jfam
Not much at all really, a few raps posted, that's about it. It's been quite quiet
Thread: Nightlife - new rap, newish style. What do you think? (7 Replies, 2,367 Views) by Jfam
Thanks, and I'd ask you to keep on rapping cos what verses you produce are good. And glad you found the flow :)
Thread: Nightlife - new rap, newish style. What do you think? (7 Replies, 2,367 Views) by Jfam
The rapping starts after 16 bars which is at 26-27 seconds. I used a 16 bar intro on this beat at 140 bpm. But yeah, 26-27 seconds is the start :)
Thread: Rap about partylife (3 Replies, 1,033 Views) by Jfam
Nice story telling, quite funny at points actually. If I could criticise one small thing it is that I just don't feel that it flows quite right. Did you write it to a beat or is this just written cos...
Thread: Nightlife - new rap, newish style. What do you think? (7 Replies, 2,367 Views) by Jfam
Thanks, I'm gonna look into that now :) I think the idea is to make a hook which the listener would want to rap along to :) anyway, thanks
Thread: My second rap song about a girl (3 Replies, 263,915 Views) by Jfam
Well, I like it. Mainly because I like your flow and your message. It ain't one of those empty "I'm gonna bang her then her then her" raps. I think it's a well crafted rap with meaning. My only...
Thread: Nightlife - new rap, newish style. What do you think? (7 Replies, 2,367 Views) by Jfam
And for your information, this was written to my beat "solution" on my YouTube channel
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Thread: Nightlife - new rap, newish style. What do you think? (7 Replies, 2,367 Views) by Jfam
Well, this is my new rap "Nightlife" which is inspired through a friends experience rather than mine. It takes the themes from both nightclubs and house parties, much the reason why it wasn't called...
Thread: My 64 - Kinda freestyle thing (0 Replies, 2,539 Views) by Jfam
Ok, so this is actually a freestyle of mine but with a few minutes of touching up and changing up but mostly freestyle. Anyway, what do you think?
This was written listening to the Go Again beat...
Thread: It Goes On - New Rap (4 Replies, 1,620 Views) by Jfam
Thanks :) a helpful comment, I know have stuff to work on. I can see what you mean by those lines and I'm gonna work on some stuff to repair it which I will post on another date. And the punches,...
Thread: Just 'cuz I got bored ... (37 Replies, 5,079 Views) by Jfam
Sorry, they are hard but you gotta flow really well. I'd like to see a full song from you anyhow :)