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Thread: I Will Breathe (1 Replies, 4,631 Views) by orsen
I love the chorus, excellent
Thread: Jim Colyer's Greatest Hits (0 Replies, 2,345 Views) by orsen
You too can have all 250,000 of Jim Colyer's greatest hits, 15,000 of which he wrote and posted yesterday. Who can forget these favorites:
Everything I Write Is Gold
Its All About Quantity
...
Thread: "You've Never Been Snaked Like This Before" (2 Replies, 2,324 Views) by orsen
I like this one, daddy said never turn it down is a great line. This reminds me of that song "Bad To The Bone", remember that one? Some of the lines in this song are better then the lines in that...
Thread: Untitled (I'm a blast from the past) (1 Replies, 10,748 Views) by orsen
Great lines in here just like your other post, hope people read them.
Thread: Untitled (Dear [fill in the blank man]) (2 Replies, 20,147 Views) by orsen
Some excellent lines in this, ah, War and Peace of songs. Its way too long and nobody will read it all the way through so some of your best lines will not get read. Start hacking dude.
Thread: "Come Wormwood" (Life's No Fairy Tale) (7 Replies, 4,880 Views) by orsen
LOL, where is that devastating comet, great line
Thread: First Song..! Yay!? (2 Replies, 2,728 Views) by orsen
Yea, way too long but some great stuff for your first time. Some of the rhymes are forced, like you tried too hard when you didn't have to because you were doing just fine with it. I love to see...
Thread: We're Done (1 Replies, 1,731 Views) by orsen
I love reading this after reading I Promise, are you talking to the same girl? "I sent you a text" doesn't sound like you Jim, doesn't sound like something you would normally put in a lyric, maybe...
Thread: Pillamatic (2 Replies, 2,706 Views) by orsen
Agree with above, very well-written and produces a easy picture to see.
Thread: 8 Forever. (1 Replies, 2,152 Views) by orsen
There are some great lines in there its just too difficult to read, you need to break it up into verses or something, at least put some distance between some of the thoughts, I mean spaces. I like...
Thread: Loveshot (2 Replies, 1,744 Views) by orsen
Some great lines but I didn't understand the topic, but then again I'm dumb
Thread: Burton St. (0 Replies, 670 Views) by orsen
Asked a stranger
For somewhere to eat
She said theres no more stranger
Then here on Burton St.
Saw a baby
Wearing a toupee
Advising Siamese Twins
To go their separate ways
Thread: The King is Dead! (0 Replies, 1,406 Views) by orsen
You didn't see me in Fresno
I don't sell tires in Maine
That wasn't me you spotted
doing laundry in Key Biscayne
So let my body rest in Graceland
and let my soul go home
Ladies and Gentlemen...
Thread: Cause I'm Love (0 Replies, 742 Views) by orsen
I'm about to sneak up on Rebecca
when she wakes up and looks Ted in the eyes
But I'll abandon the housewife in Texas
and become an accessory to murder for hire
I'll be the reason the Clark's...
Thread: Heavy Metal Hell (3 Replies, 1,454 Views) by orsen
"Feedin' muses to hungry demons" is a great line for sure
Thread: a song i never wrote (1 Replies, 1,094 Views) by orsen
You're right, how many people of all ages are feeling this way? Hope more people read this one
Thread: She's Built (1 Replies, 924 Views) by orsen
I love this one Jim, one of your best in my opinion. Great work, excellent title wish I had thought of it
Thread: Mild Winter (2 Replies, 1,005 Views) by orsen
I love the line "mild winter in Tahiti" for some reason, only you Jim could make a song out of the weather
Thread: Burton St. (4 Replies, 1,134 Views) by orsen
Thank you Doug thats very kind
Thread: Burton St. (4 Replies, 1,134 Views) by orsen
Said I was a stranger looking
for somewhere to eat
She said theres no more stranger
then down on Burton St.
First thing I saw was a baby
wearing a toupee
giving directions to Simease twins...
Thread: Black Gold (0 Replies, 789 Views) by orsen
Found a fix thats legal
and taxed when its sold
Theres no AA meetings to attend
and I never just say no
It made Jed Clampet rich
Made J.R. Ewing scheme
Turned the Getty's into the Kennedy's...
Thread: The World Has Changed For us (0 Replies, 907 Views) by orsen
It's not fair to her
Not right for me
When you wake up
just to go home to your wife
When you say good-bye to me
and hello to her
You're not just fooling yourself
You're cheating who came...
Thread: Ring, Ring ,Ring (3 Replies, 1,899 Views) by orsen
I liked this, I think Abba had a song called "Ring, Ring" back in the 70's, check it out. I liked how you put text and mobile communication in there, we all have to start doing this with our lyrics.
Thread: Old Witchcraft (4 Replies, 1,698 Views) by orsen
Some excellent lines even though I did'nt understand alot of this, but great effort
Thread: Our Secret (2 Replies, 1,572 Views) by orsen
Great title and lyric followed an excellent idea, thanks
Thread: Nothingtown (5 Replies, 1,167 Views) by orsen
This deserves a reply so I'm giving it one, there is some good lines in here and I hope more people read it
Thread: Legend Of Bret Maverick (3 Replies, 1,294 Views) by orsen
I loved that you managed to put Jim Garner's name in a lyric, great
Thread: Money (9 Replies, 1,901 Views) by orsen
Nice lyric with some outstanding lines hope more read it
Thread: Up Down & Out (1 Replies, 1,214 Views) by orsen
Excellent, well done I really enjoyed this one
Thread: Rivers Flow Deep (8 Replies, 1,430 Views) by orsen
Some great images here because of the nice job you did with the lyrics. I enjoyed reading it, thanks.
Thread: I Was Born To Lose (2 Replies, 1,002 Views) by orsen
Great lyrics, hope more people read this. Thanks for posting it.
Thread: Dancing in the rain (2 Replies, 990 Views) by orsen
Excellent True, nicely done. Your lyrics have made me think about trying to banish some negative thoughts I carry around, thanks
Thread: Bloodsucker (1 Replies, 962 Views) by orsen
First this is an excellent idea, original and that counts for alot. Some great images in here, its a good piece of work RR, I hope more people read it.
Thread: I Can't Keep Holding On (3 Replies, 1,392 Views) by orsen
Some great lines in this, should'nt be overlooked. I wish I had the sound of the music going through John's head when he wrote this, I would appreciate it more I bet.
Thread: All The Good Ones Are Taken (2 Replies, 1,112 Views) by orsen
Liked it Jim, kind of country cynical
Thread: Brazil World Cup Chant (4 Replies, 2,352 Views) by orsen
Good idea Brent
Thread: Dominate (3 Replies, 1,839 Views) by orsen
This is good, the anger comes through. I liked it
Thread: I love you, mom. (2 Replies, 2,066 Views) by orsen
Beautiful Siouxie, just beautiful. I want to give this a bump so more people will read it.
Thread: man consumes man (5 Replies, 2,803 Views) by orsen
I like it
Thread: The Light (2 Replies, 1,883 Views) by orsen
A little bit of editing and this would be just fine
Thread: Stan (1 Replies, 1,362 Views) by orsen
Still remember the day
When the Boss called me in
He said "Stan I'm sorry"
and I spiralled down again
And I landed, on America's deadend
Where everything I own is in my pockets
and everything...
Thread: In Other Words (0 Replies, 1,169 Views) by orsen
Would'nt it be great
If I could say I love you
a 1000 different ways
and still make you understand
Wo ie ni is how I'd tell you in Bejing
Je t'aime from underneath the Eiffel Tower
Ti Amo...
Thread: Emerica (0 Replies, 1,233 Views) by orsen
She sits at home every night
Bored to tears by the tears from her eyes
Her 2.5 kids are out raising hell
Shes got a parent downstairs she can't afford to keep well
How do you commute to India...
Thread: Simple Plan (3 Replies, 1,538 Views) by orsen
Thank you OSW, very kind of you
Thread: Simple Plan (3 Replies, 1,538 Views) by orsen
If I was Shakespeare I'd simply write you a sonnet
Bogart I would simply light your cigarrette
James Bond I'd serve you martini's in a tuxedo
Rhett Butler I would say I don't give a damn
But...
Thread: One Wish (1 Replies, 1,340 Views) by orsen
If I had one wish
I'd change the world
and make everyone think
an angel heard their words
Or I'd change one life
and make one person know
that someones finally on their side
Because one...
Thread: A song I wrote for my wifeI call it Priceless (need feedback) (9 Replies, 4,065 Views) by orsen
I like it...I did it like I was rapping and it sounded really good.
Thread: Clean Dirt (1 Replies, 1,581 Views) by orsen
Love your title, can I steal it? lol, just kidding.
Thread: R.I.P. American Pie (0 Replies, 1,340 Views) by orsen
I borrowed Don's Chevy
and went to the leeve for a slice of my youth
I found Rocket Man fighting on a saturday night
after returning from the dark side of the Moon
He told me rumours
about the...
Thread: I Met Love (3 Replies, 1,570 Views) by orsen
Hi B, everything you said was correct, you are right about your observations..........needs work for sure, thanks for reading, Orsen.