Run With Her

She’s an untamed mustang
Never gonna settle
She’ll keep running till the morning breaks

She’s a jagged scar
Rough around the edges
Keeps you guessing every move that she makes

She’s a roaring wildfire
More than you can handle
Always pushing until she’s won

She’s a raging thunderstorm
Full of unbridled power
She’ll destroy just when you think that she’s gone

Pre-Chorus:
She’ll chew you up, then spit you out
Won’t wait for you, won’t back down

Chorus:
She’s free as a bird with the night on her wings
Looking for a brand new day
She’s flying and floating, doesn’t know where she’s going
But she’ll make it out her own way
She’ll run wild with the wolves
Look death in the eye
Tempt fate every chance that she gets
But she still hasn’t found someone crazy enough
To run with her, yet

She’s a rolling rock
Don’t stop for nobody
Run you over if you stand in her way

She’s a runaway truck
Always spinning her wheels
Living for every today

She’s got a watchful eye
Always looking around
For the man who’s built to last

She’ll put ‘em to the test
But then they always second-guess
They all give up way too fast

Pre-Chorus:
She’ll chew you up, then spit you out
Won’t wait for you, won’t back down

Chorus:
She’s free as a bird with the night on her wings
Looking for a brand new day
She’s flying and floating, doesn’t know where she’s going
But she’ll make it out her own way
She’ll run wild with the wolves
Look death in the eye
Tempt fate every chance that she gets
But she still hasn’t found someone crazy enough
To run with her, yet

Bridge:
She’s a roaring wildfire
She’s a rolling rock
She’s an untamed mustang
She’s a runaway truck

Pre-Chorus:
She’ll chew you up, then spit you out
Won’t wait for you, won’t back down

Chorus:
She’s free as a bird with the night on her wings
Looking for a brand new day
She’s flying and floating, doesn’t know where she’s going
But she’ll make it out her own way
She’ll run wild with the wolves
Look death in the eye
Tempt fate every chance that she gets
But she still hasn’t found someone crazy enough
To run with her, yet

Wow. I really, really like this. Your imagery's great for starters; even without the tune they're exciting lyrics. You've a couple of lines that could be improved upon, though. Like "She’ll destroy just when you think that she’s gone". If we go with the line it rhymes with, "Always pushing until she’s won", then this one is too long. I'd maybe chop it to "She'll destroy you when you think she's gone", which fits better in my head. But, maybe it's meant to be like that! I dunno
I just love the way this is written. I'd really like to hear what this is mean to sound like some day!

I like your song. I saw it on another forum. With a rockin' melody and beat, this could really be something.
Jim

Thank you!

Very good my friend, very good. I will agree with Katie13 on the line she mentioned. Yet all in all I like this.

Thanks for the compliments everyone! And the helpful suggestions. I appreciate it

First of all, squishy3, I came to listen to your song because your previous "un-titled" one was so good. So I'm back.

Second, at the beginning I thought the four rather equal verses were too boring in tempo . . . but . . .

Third, that's because I hadn't seen the dramatic impact of what you call the "Pre-chorus" and the "Chorus."

Fouth, this song ROCKS!

Fifth, the Bridge blows me away, because I can actually "hear" this in my head--and the last stanza is SCREAMIN' !! "A run-away truck!!" [Don't know about you, but I've seen a run-away semi-tractor-trailer truck in the mountains--and it's absolutely frightening!!! Thank God (literally) for those pre-built "UP" ramps that allow them to "run-away" off the expressway and uphill to bring them hopefully to a stop!]

Sixth, I agree with Katie13 about the wording of the one line--which I missed--the grammar needs to be clearer.

Seventh, I respectfully disagree with Katie13 that the same line (above-noted) may be too long. I used to believe this (about six months ago). But I have learned since that poetry (my forte') and songs can differ in their mathematical sense. In poetry, if a line is longer, it needs to somehow make sense and usually be balanced out in some way. But with song . . . more syllables can be inserted within the "note" than just one. Sometimes this adds interest to the song, especially one with such an "even" beginning. Lyrics "squeezed in" at this point might actually relate the coming sense of "out of control," which this song is about! For me, "She'll destroy you just when you think that she's gone," would work or some other expression you might choose. The tempo has to work, but the number of syllables do not . . . 'Cause you're about to launch into the song's craziness . . !

Just IMHO. But I thank you for this song and hope you will make a HUGE announcement at ATL when you sell or record it, because it is a winner!!!
I can almost hear it already. Truly. Send me a PM when that happens!

Wow, thanks so much Frankie! That is one of the best compliments I've ever gotten