Adventure

I wrote this song one afternoon. I was just chilling and started thinking about when I first met my girlfriend and I was on such a high, on top of the world and how good I felt. I took myself back to those times and wrote about how I felt at this time thinking back to then. I added one or two lines of humour into the song too!

When we first met I couldnt find the words to say
I never thought we'd be together for so many days
I was always the geek in front of computer screens
Thats how it was in my teens
You took my hand and pulled me close
And introduced me to the Sunday roast
You sat me down and told me straight
At the time I didnt think it would be this great

You hold me tight, and we jump up high
And it really feels like we're touching the sky
We can see the clouds and we see the sun
When I'm with you its too much fun
We touch the stars and the moon
It feels like we're in a hot air balloon
Planes fly by as we leave the sky
This is our adventure, yours and mine

We've had ups and downs and one or two fights
But now its different, this time it feels right
We dont talk, only when its serious
And even then Im probably delerious
I like how you introduced me to Soccer AM
And the wonders of cooking with Uncle Ben's
I'm sorry if I dont remember our very first date
But I'm sure we are more than fate

You hold me tight, and we jump up high
And it really feels like we're touching the sky
We can see the clouds and we see the sun
When I'm with you its too much fun
We touch the stars and the moon
It feels like we're in a hot air balloon
Planes fly by as we leave the sky
This is our adventure, yours and mine

kmatt1987: I happen to like your love song. You take the reader on an adventure, too, from a geeky, clueless guy (who doesn't remember the first date--he was probably thinking about getting back online that night), to a guy who paid attention when someone spoke to his soul, and brought him into reality to live! This was an adventure. I buy it so much that it sounds autobiographical. And I think there are many who could relate to the lyrics and many more who should listen to the lyrics and wake up to living.

The only constructive criticism is on this line:

I'm sorry if I dont remember our very first date
But I'm sure we are more than fate

I agree totally with the last line's meaning, but compared to the pace of the rest of the song . . . the wording seems too short to give it the impact it needs to carry your good meaning through to the listener. As I've been saying, O.W.O. (One Woman's Opinion)!

Thanks for sharing your song.

This is a good little song/poem.I agree with Frankie (of course!)and one little other thing;the word"But"in the line,But now it's different,this time it feels right."The "But"throws off the perfect rhythm to me.(Being a Drummer-Boy,Rhythm is very important to me)Do with this as you will,it's only an opinion,I could be wrong.Make that a great little song/poem!