I Wish You Were With Me Now

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  1. kmatt1987 said:

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    Been away a while, managed to write 2 new songs. This one's called 'I Wish You Were With Me Now'. Its a bit repetitive...

    Thinking back to the times
    When there was only me and you
    I wish you were here
    And I wish you were with me now
    When I smiled you were the only one
    That could see
    There's the others that see
    But they just see right through me

    I have been waiting for so long
    I need your time so please tell me whats going on
    And I wish you were here
    But I wish you were with me now

    Thinking back to the times
    When there was only me and you
    And I wish you were here
    And I wish you were with me now
    When I smiled you were the only one
    That could see
    And there's the others that see
    But they just see right through me

    I have been waiting for so long
    I need your time so please tell me whats going on
    And I wish you were here
    But I wish you were with me now
     
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    Is this the whole song? I think it was really nice. If this is the whole song, maybe you should try to make it a little less repetitive. You made us focus on the main indea of the song by repeating some lines, but there aren't enough details. It's harder to tell a story if the song is short. I liked it , but the feeling isn't very strong. This is just my opinion.
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