When You Became a Memory

Thread: When You Became a Memory

Tags: lessons, lies, memory, new love
  1. Amanda Lee Yokeley said:

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    We were hot and heavy back in highschool
    I just knew one day I'd be your wife
    But that was then, and I have changed since you last saw me
    And we both moved on with our own lives

    You stayed out at night and flirted with the ladies
    While I cried myself to sleep
    I let you break my heart to pieces
    Your lies were just excuses, and all your talk was cheap

    I said "one day you'll do enough to make me hate you"
    Sorry cant bring back a love thats dead and gone
    You became a memory
    When I was strong enough to leave you alone
    Leave you alone
    I wish it hadn't taken me so long
    But what's said is said, and done is done

    If I saw you now I'd look right past you
    Its funny how time can change who we were
    Back then I would have kissed the ground you walked on
    Today I'd keep on walking, thats for sure

    I said "one day you'll do enough to make me hate you"
    Sorry cant bring back a love thats dead and gone
    You became a memory
    When I was strong enough to leave you alone
    Leave you alone
    I wish it hadn't taken me so long
    But what's said is said, and done is done

    Now I have the life I always wanted
    And you hardly ever cross my mind
    I sure am glad I just kept walking
    Because making memories just takes time

    You did enough to make me hate you
    Sorry wont bring back a love thats dead and gone
    You became a memory
    When I was strong enough to leave you alone
    so I left you alone
    I wish it hadn't taken me so long
    But what's said is said, and done is done
    Amanda Yokeley
     
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    Doug Denslowe said:

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    I'm a sucker for a simple love tale!Welcome to ATL!I think you'll like it here,since you write good lines,I think you'll get the well deserved feedback.Only thing I would suggest,try to put commas in,to make the rhythm easier to get!Like the line,"today I'd keep on walking,that's for sure."
     
  3. Amanda Lee Yokeley said:

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    Thanks doug! I appreciate the feedback!
     
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    amaryn said:

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    Hi,amanda! Tale of a human springcleaning no fussing around. How do you see it yourself? A poem or a song? It could be a story told by a bluesguitar+voice.welcome!
     
  5. Amanda Lee Yokeley said:

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    Thanks! Hey thats a good way of putting it! I thought of it more as a song probably country lol i wish i knew how to write music to go with, but blues might be cool too!
     
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    Jim Colyer said:

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    Prosaic enough to be a short story. But you tell it like it is. It is interesting to pinpoint the exact moment that a person becomes a memory.
     
  7. Amanda Lee Yokeley said:

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    Thanks jim, it was a true story as a matter of fact
     
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    amaryn said:

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    Quote Originally Posted by Amanda Lee Yokeley View Post
    Thanks! Hey thats a good way of putting it! I thought of it more as a song probably country lol i wish i knew how to write music to go with, but blues might be cool too!

    Well, I stick to the bluesguitar, as I can really hear that going well that way- but to try other styles is never excluded, of course.
    Thanks a zillion, anyway, Amanda and yes- great to have you around