Everything

Thread: Everything

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  1. Katie13's Avatar

    Katie13 said:

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    Strange,
    How you can make frustrations disappear,
    A simple smile in my direction,
    I forget to cry,

    And now,
    Whenever you stare deep into my eyes,
    My heart begins to soar, I swear I've
    Never felt so high,

    Please, I don't think I could take,
    A day without your presence,
    Whichever road I take,
    Please, don't ever leave me here,
    All alone with my mind,
    It's suddenly clear,
    You're everything,

    See,
    How I change when you are close to me,
    And how we always laugh together,
    Talk away the night,

    Please, I don't think I could take,
    A day without your presence,
    Whichever road I take,
    Please, don't ever leave me here,
    All alone with my mind,
    It's suddenly clear,
    You're everything,

    Don't ever think for a moment,
    You'll ever let me down,
    All your flaws are perfect to me,
    Head's in the clouds but you keep me here on the ground!

    Please, I don't think I could take,
    A day without your presence,
    Whichever road I take,
    Please, don't ever leave me here,
    All alone with my mind,
    It's suddenly clear,
    You're everything,

    I've got nothing to fear,
    While you're everything,

    Please, please,
    You're everything


    (This is awful. I haven't written lyrics in... ages. Feel free to slate and destroy)
    "If you were me, then I'd be you, and if I were you, I'd hide somewhere faraway..."
     
  2. Johnb31's Avatar

    Johnb31 said:

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    It's not awful at all it's actually pretty good maybe a little wordy but I don't know your rhythm and I like wordy songs anyway so I'm not one to question it. I really like the chorus it's the heart of the song like it should, brings everything together as one nice job.
    There is not enough space or time to truly let the song unwind
     
  3. Katie13's Avatar

    Katie13 said:

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    Yeah. Some of the lines don't really fit the pattern I ended up using. It was kind of a test, to see whether I was out of practice.

    I am so out of practice :P
    "If you were me, then I'd be you, and if I were you, I'd hide somewhere faraway..."
     
  4. Jim Colyer's Avatar

    Jim Colyer said:

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    I like it. It's a nice love song with a feminine touch.
     
  5. coral834's Avatar

    coral834 said:

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    to me it seems more straight up poetry than a song.. i can picture me at a poetry reading and hear someone reading something like this...i do like it however, and hope you dont take it as something its not..and i agree with Jim, it definitely has a woman's touch

    keep writting...your not as out of touch or practice as you think!!!
     
  6. Peter Both said:

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    This song is a diamond in the rough. When I try to imagine what kind of music could go with these lyrics, I come up with 'If You Don't Know Me By Now' by Harold Melvin and the Blue Notes.
     
  7. Doug Denslowe's Avatar

    Doug Denslowe said:

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    Very Door-ish!If you can think out of the box Music,it works.