Beginning of a new song... Don't know the title yet.

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  1. meli2235 said:

    Default Beginning of a new song... Don't know the title yet.

    Why did you have to go
    didn’t you think I had the right to know?
    Did you ever look back
    And wish you were on the right track
    Or that you could start over?
    I would have let you start over

    Daddy Don’t you love me anymore?
    Please don’t leave me
    I cried as he walked out the door
    I keep replaying it so much in my head
    That it feels like it will split
    and I still can’t fathom it,
    Why did you leave me?
    Didn’t you hear my plea?
    Was taking care of me really that rough
    Or was I simply just not good enough

    Maybe I misunderstood
    When you used to say
    that you would never forget about me
    What you said and what you did
    were always like night and day

    Daddy Don’t you love me anymore?
    Please don’t leave me
    I cried as he walked out the door
    I keep replaying it so much in my head
    That it feels like it will split
    and I still can’t fathom it,
    Why did you leave me?
    Didn’t you hear my plea?
    Was taking care of me really that rough
    Or was I simply just not good enough

    My heart cries everyday in every way
    For what should have been but just slipped away
    Why did you let it slip away?

    Daddy Don’t you love me anymore?
    Please don’t leave me
    I cried as he walked out the door
    I keep replaying it so much in my head
    That it feels like it will split
    and I still can’t fathom it,
    Why did you leave me?
    Didn’t you hear my plea?
    Was taking care of me really that rough
    Or was I simply just not good enough
    Last edited by meli2235; 01-21-2014 at 10:00 PM.
     
  2. meli2235 said:

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    This one will probably be the most emotional one that I have written yet,
     
  3. ElegantButler said:

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    I must be very hard for you to write. It sounds like you've been rather badly hurt. As for the title, when you are finished you'll find it in the words that reach deepest into your soul.
     
  4. meli2235 said:

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    True to both and yeah I probably will think of one later.
     
  5. meli2235 said:

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    Finished I think but I can't tell if that should be my chorus or switch one of the verses?
     
  6. Wilson said:

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    Awesome dear
     
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    amaryn said:

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    Hi!
    I don't think it needs more lyrics.
    The less spreading out, the stronger the song.
    The theme is dramatic.
    Such songs have been written around this theme, but new ones are always welcome.
    One of the most famous "leaving" songs was probably The Beatles' "she's leaving home"
    In this case it's dad who can't cope.
    Standing in the true world you repeat the central thought: "Daddy, don't you love me anymore?"
    Or even worse: was it never true?
    Thanks. Good to read, but don't lengthen it too much, will you?
    Then it will be strongest.