You Showed Me

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  1. Lovenotez07 said:

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    I Wanted to love you
    I wanted to share my life
    All I ever wanted
    Was to be your wife
    But it never seemed
    to be quite enough
    And I couldn't live
    With a man I couldn't trust

    You showed me
    What it was
    to feel heartache and pain
    You showed me
    what it was
    to cry tears down like rain

    Now the days slip away
    They've turned into months
    It's been almost a year
    Since you walked out on us

    Geneva R Patterson
    Copyright ©2007 Geneva R Patterson
     
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    Hi! Again these lyrics are very good! Again very powerful with a clear message, I like them also anybody, again whether they've experienced it or not, can relate to these lyrics because they're so vividly clear, you can feel what you feel! The only thing that I am unsure about is the end, I'm not sure if it ends a bit too abruptly, like you maybe want a some sort of explanation, or closure. It just seems to end too quick, but then that could just be me!
    Do you serve a purpose or purposely serve?
     
  3. rawchord said:

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    yes i agree with spudmunky my idea would be to repeat the first verse at the end to sort of round the whole song off, just a thought like it though
     
  4. Lovenotez07 said:

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    Thank you I'm glad you like it- and it means alot to me that other people can feel my emotions in my words. As far as rounding it off the middle verse (the chorus) repeats at the end- ending the song. what do you think of that way? I actually had this one recorded in Nashville it turned out sounding pretty good.