Can someone please tell me why
I really don’t understand
Girls just go for the bad guy
They get the back of his hand
It will not happen again
But these words he said before
He says he loves you but then
Hes knockin down the front door
He lies
The anger starts to rise
Your scarred
He has gone too far
The tears
Always living in fear
End it
And I will try to mend it
Your heart is now in pieces
Like a puzzle ripped to shreds
Your eyes are now just creases
A product of his sick head
Why is this all repeating
The circle wont go away
It always ends in beating
Why cant you just see the way
He lies
The anger starts to rise
Your scarred
He has gone too far
The tears
Always living in fear
End it
And I will try to mend it
I hate to see you falling
Why keep going to these guys
My arms are open calling
Look into my honest eyes
I don’t want to see you weep
Come with me and dry your eyes
Soon youll find that I am deep
Please don’t turn back to those guys
He lies
The anger starts to rise
Your scarred
He has gone too far
The tears
Always living in fear
End it
And I will try to mend it
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End It
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Hey, I read all of your lyrics, and they're really good. But maybe you should try structuring your songs a little different. The use of words is great, but maybe you should try to add a little more. Keep up the great work!
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Thank you, I always appreciate tips. What exactly do you mean by adding a little bit more? I'm rather new to writing lyrics and just started because of some recent inspiration. Are you referring to adding more in the way of Verse/Chorus/Bridge structuring?
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What I mean is that by adding more you should maybe add some more wording into the lines to vary it up, but still keep a rhythm. And also you could try to mess around with the V/C/V/C/B/C set up, that set up is what most every song uses, and gets really boring after a while. But, nonetheless, you're lyrics are good! Especially for a beginner! Try to look at some other people's lyrics on the forum, and maybe it will give you some ideas. Also, check mine out!
Originally Posted by JeffM
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That is some good advice, and I will certainly work on a slightly altered scheme. I read a few of your lyrics so far, and they are pretty good. Always seems to have a good message between the lines. Keep it coming!
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Jeff, I read your posts days ago but I couldn't login and post. You wrote a lot of good stuff, really good, and yeah it'll be good if you can work some structure into it (carefully) but the word-flow itself is just great. In fact it's so good that this one pissed me off a coupla times
... keep it up, I'll be eager to read everything you put out here.
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Thank you, I appreciate the reception I have had so far from all of you. This is actually the first song I ever wrote, and it seems you got the feeling that I had when I wrote this.
